Reviews for Hell Hounds
Pretend Jane chapter 15 . 8/8/2011
So I thought this was a pretty intriguing read. The only thing that bugged me was that you implied a lot of things but never explained them all in the end to wrap up the story.

I always noticed the tension between Gabriel and Michael. You implied that it was due to them possibly fighting over Elaine or you'd be vague and say they didn't get along. Why was it never explained in the end? That one argument when both of the guys went off and started yelling in some language was never explained either.

You didn't go into a lot of details about when Michael became mated to Elaine either. It was implied that he must have set it up with her parents years ago. But when? I was curious about the back story and what made Michael, so much older, want to mate with someone so young? I didn't get it and would have loved an explanation. As much as I liked Michael, I couldn't help but think it was odd, him having an adult son, and wanting to mate with someone way younger than him and his son. I know it's a werewolf thing, but an explanation would have helped me more.

And why didn't you tell us more about who Greg's mother was and what happened between her and Michael? It seemed important to me and since he's a huge character, strangely overlooked. Especially when you'd go into details about insignificant characters...

You never explained why Pavel didn't like his mother either or the story about when Nathan met Sebastian's mother. I was curious about this after Michael asked Nate what he felt when he met her. I also would have liked to know why Nathan went so insane over Pavel not wanting to join the family business and you didn't even say too much about what that business is...

The biggest thing I think you overlooked was that you never explained how Elaine and her family became so close to the can look at some things on the surface I guess, but it would have been nice to know why Elaine could be the only who could talk to Nathan the ways she does or any of the other Durands. It would have been nice to know why her parents chose Nathan to become her godfather. More story background would have been nice.

I think you wrote this story for yourself and not an audience. When a person writes for them self, a lot of details get left out because they know it all. When a person writes for an audience, the audience gets informed. Since I was left in the dark a lot, I think working on writing for an audience would be helpful for you.

I noticed you said you were going to send this to an agent, I think in your rewriting process it would be good to explain these things. Because as a reader I was left wondering and unsatisfied because of these unanswered questions. I try to give advice on writing. You don't have to take it if you don't want to.
Alicat05812 chapter 15 . 8/1/2011
Ok I loved this story just as well. I was wondering if you were going to put up another one that would go to it for how her life goes with micheal and after she is trained a bit more.
Maggs chapter 15 . 7/12/2011
WOW! This was AMAZING! I read this and the CanisLupus story as well and LOVED them a lot. Fabulous job! :D
Non.graceful chapter 15 . 7/10/2011
Hmm... I enjoyed the bits with Michael in them especially :)

This was told well and I congratulate you on your feat (success)!

There weren't as many mistakes in this one as the last, but they were still there!

Well... That's all :)

Hope you keep on writing :D
starlight-x-A-x chapter 15 . 1/19/2011
Fantastic fics. I read the other yesterday and now just finished this one. I loved them. Great plot and great pacing, i love how the build up to Michael and Elaine has been going on since chapter 1 of the 1st fic. But now I am desperate for some more from the two of them. Some things confused me a little, like what country they're in, how they hop from one place to another (ie another country) so quickly as well as a few other little things, but none of that detracts from my enjoyment or the quality of the fics. Like I said, fantastic. :D
Awesomechef chapter 15 . 1/16/2011
Super great ending. :) I look forward to more in the series should you continue it!
Awesomechef chapter 4 . 1/14/2011
Hey love your story :) I read the first one too. I am a little confused though because in the first one Leo was the London pack alpha and now it says Cologne. Hope you can clear that up. And great job, you're an exceptional writer.
witeaya chapter 15 . 1/8/2011
i adore canislupus very very much and im super glad that hell hounds didn't disappoint.

imo the writing style and original,unique plot are the series' strongest points.

i just wish the romance part of the story was more prominent in the a one shot will curb my romantic craving? :)

keep on writing amazing stories!
ella chapter 15 . 1/1/2011
oh, wow! this story was great just like the first one. I adored the little moments of romance and how you blended so well with all the action and drama. It was just perfect, at the end i was kind of disapointed because i didnt want it to end at that point, maybe you could have added another chapter of how it went in united states and gave us a little lemon between michael and elain when they mated. that would bring so much satisfaction to me and im sure to everyone else whos read this or are reading this. Never the less, i still give it a 10!
The Imagination Addict chapter 15 . 12/20/2010
Heyhey! So I loved this sequel! Actually, I think it’d be a lot better if u combined ur two books. And then for ur edits, work on the romance a bit more. Although u hint at Gabriel liking Elaine, u didn’t write about it explicitly, which kinda made it a bit of a loose end. Anyway, if u combine both ur books, you’ll have a mega book as thick as Harry Potter 7, and maybe it’ll be a bestseller!
That One Dork Stacey chapter 15 . 10/13/2010
I think this is like the third time that I've reread the series and I really can't get over how amazingly well written it is. It's crazy. I'm pretty sure this won't be the last time I reread them lol I just really hope you do start on another addition. Hell, if you published, I'd definitely buy each and every book.

Truly amazing.

-Stace :]
Sakiru Yume chapter 15 . 9/18/2010
I really liked this story, but I felt that you wrapped it up way to quickly. It was building up to the climax, and then it was done. And I thought that you should have told us that they were mates a lot earlier. It was really obvious, and then it got to be kind of annoying, because I, at least, had no problem figuring it out, but she didn't seem smart enough to get it even with having all the same information we as the reader did.

And what was up with Gabriel? What happened to him? Did I just miss that part?

And were they named for angels? Random question, but I just thought of it.
bloodbunny chapter 15 . 8/8/2010
I LOVED your two stories! I would really like it if you were able to continue on with a third story... in which Michael and Elaine got together and became mates. I LOVE romance!
mary chapter 15 . 7/29/2010
i loved this story! and the first story as well. I pretty much read both stories in 2 days. i just couldnt stop reading. PLEASE make a third installment. i want to see what happens between michael and elaine. ah you're an amazing writer! i'm seriously surprised this isn't published! keep it up! and please write a 3rd one! :)
FrogsOfAChocolateLikeNature chapter 15 . 7/25/2010
My one request: Please, please write the sequel? I've been a fan of these stories since the middle of Canislupus. I keep imagining what happens next but I can't get very far. Please, pretty please, continue it.

Also, who is Nathan, Michael, Gaberiel, and Cassiel's mother?
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