Reviews for Abandoned
Qzie chapter 1 . 12/24/2008
Oh, that made me sad. Trying to hold onto a friend after a long time... it gets hard sometimes, but it's worth it. :) Merry Christmas. -Qzie
AK the Twilight chapter 1 . 12/24/2008
"I'm abandoned in a way/with many ways" felt a bit confusing; perhaps the repeated use of the word way made it like that.

The line "and it tastes like the sky" is brilliantly elaborate, definitely one of the best lines throughout. The desperation and confusion fuels this poem's power, and although some lines feel a bit messy, this poem was full of strong imagery and excellent tone. Keep up the excellent work!
Living Life Free chapter 1 . 12/24/2008
"The closed wounds are opend

one more time, welcome

to my prison, to my prison."

This is Great. I've felt like this many times.
Erlkoenigin chapter 1 . 12/23/2008
Ein schöner Song, besonders die Schlußzeile:

I'm abandoned in a way

with many ways,

which one I should pick

to meet you again?

Jetzt fehlt nur noch jemand, der ihn vertont
Remember Me to Dawn chapter 1 . 12/22/2008
I love the emotion. I love the lines "and it tastes like the sky/we fall from/ if you're abandoned" so beautiful
Natalie-Rayne chapter 1 . 12/22/2008
Aww, sweet! I love this song!
Isca chapter 1 . 12/21/2008
"Don't you? I'd like to know." Full of angst! So sad!

"I'm abandoned, in a way." Genuine. Honest. Full of emotion.