This poem doesn't make a whole lot of sense, which is sad because it has a lot of really good images in it.

"the spinning flash / of light developing" - very nice, original image. I'm proud. :D I like this a lot.

"learn the lies we've / found refuge in" - this line is very poignant, possibly just because I can relate. It's not the most original, but brilliantly executed.

I also like the idea of "grey notions". :) Very good.

Your poems are very refreshingly original in this wasteland of crap that is fictionpress.

-Jesse

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"The spinning flash of light developing." Incredible imagery! There's also a deep sense of pain behind this line; I'm not sure why, but it's really captivated me :D!

"Our grey notions..." Wow!

This is amazing! I really like how the end finishes it up.

wow.

Well done :)

"learn the lies we've

found refuge in"

nice lines and good poem:)