|Reviews for Soliloquy|
| LavenderWolf chapter 23 . 8/19/2011
So many questions! But it was really amazing and the ending gave me a sense of closure but also that there was so much more to this story. Strange, right? But anyway I really liked this story. It had complex characters and plot. At some points it felt a little slow but I mostly see how they fit in. Wonderful to read :)
| LavenderWolf chapter 17 . 8/19/2011
I just figured out why there're seven of them and their names. Hana, that is so cool. Now the story & their persionalities make much more sense.
| marzmez chapter 23 . 7/4/2011
This was a good story! I was a little frustrated with Faerie, though. She was really gullible, believing everything everyone told her at the time they told her. Is there a sequel? I guess I will have to go to your profile and find out.
| Chocorange888 chapter 23 . 4/12/2011
Great story, a lovely mix of historical and fantasy elements. Though it is sad that Alphonse left, I believe it's for good, their relationship seems very premature and naive. In fact when I first read it, I was deeply reminded of the Secret Garden. Faerie has also twisted her perspective slightly on his leaving, since I discovered there to be a sequal, I'm guessing he did come back (well to London anyway) in the end hopefully their relationship will resolve then.
On the whole, I thought the mystery of the story was extremely well done, I was so confused and I'm glad not everything was given away until the very end.
Thank you! On with the sequal!
| luzanima chapter 23 . 4/23/2010
Read this whole thing and it was amazing! Off to read your sequel, which I'm sure will be just as enthralling. Can't wait to see what becomes of everyone :)
| Faithless Juliet chapter 4 . 1/8/2010
“Hoping it would be okay with you if I took a stroll around the property. “ - I think in the context of your story her use of ‘okay’ felt too modern. In my head I’m seeing this as a late Victorian era, or a precursor to the industrial revolution. Okay wouldn’t be in use yet.
“I would make sure to stay within seeing distance of Deathcreeke.” - I love how ominous, and foreboding the name ‘deathdreeke’ is.
I feel like sometimes with this story you list details off, rather then explaining them in a natural organic way, which can be a bit distracting, but I like how you create mystery and suspense with what’s going on.
| Faithless Juliet chapter 3 . 1/8/2010
The Morgensterns are all an interesting bunch of people; I’m glad that you’ve monopolized their characterizations, and the lore of myth surrounding them. They have some strange names though…
I liked how you explained the strange tune that she’s been hearing lately, it makes me think even more strongly that there’s some sort of ghost/hidden captive in the Wainright’s house.
| Faithless Juliet chapter 2 . 1/8/2010
“To make me forget the distance that now lay between me and Mother.” - Maybe mother and I would sound better…
“I sobbed quietly while the fire in my room crackled and crackled merrily.” I liked how you transferred emotion with this sentence. Your use of ‘merrily’ was especially strong, it makes me think of boisterous flames, and a deep slow cracking, and wood smoke. And I liked how you paired it with the act of Fiona sobbing on the bed. The whole scene was very well done.
When you first mentioned the forbidden corridor I was sure that you were going for a whole Jane Eyre, secret family member locked away in the attic thing. But with the introduction of the portrait I now think you’re going to be dealing with a ghost, or maybe both…. I’m definitely intrigued.
| Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 1/8/2010
“The woman who lay in the coffin looked her.” - like her? not like her?
Interesting first start! One thing that bothered me was how drawn out a lot of this was. True, it is an opening, which by definition implies long introductions and exits. But it seemed like you spent a lot of time describing things that were not vital to the actual story. Don’t get me wrong I like the story so far, but taking a more then a few sentences to describe something or someone can get tedious.
I like how whimsical this is. I’m thinking this is set in Victorian times - just from the image I’m getting in my head. And Victorianisms are so structured and chased, yet Fiona and Fiona jr. seem to Elvin-like and jolie-faire, it’s a strong comparison.
I also liked how you utilized ‘rain’ as a third character - it only helps to strengthen the notion that these women are otherworldly in charm and spirit.
| Angel-Leigh Jones chapter 23 . 12/23/2009
a great story and i loved every bit of it. The ending seemed sad but sometimes change can be that way. I love how there was no curse and it all tied in really well.
Thank you for writing this and posting it.
| theholyromanempire chapter 23 . 7/13/2009
You're story was truely wonderful. I loved the outcome... It's really hard to express my apprecation for it in words.
I can't wait to read the sequel, and have stayed up nearly all night reading this. Again, thanks so much for the bit of light in the abyss that fictionpress has become.
| theholyromanempire chapter 13 . 7/13/2009
I have no words to describe my appreciation for this story. You are a wonderful writer.
This chapter was amazing.
| theholyromanempire chapter 11 . 7/13/2009
"...living at Deatchreeke Manor..." You switched around some of the letters in Deathcreeke. I fear that there might have been typos in the pervious chapter, but I was too enchanted with your storytelling that I missed them!
I loved her interaction with Isaac. Faerie can be quite manipulative.
| theholyromanempire chapter 10 . 7/13/2009
I'm starting to think that the seven deadly sins have something to do with the Morgensterns.
| theholyromanempire chapter 9 . 7/13/2009
Alphonse's character really surprised me. I very much enjoyed this chapter.