Reviews for Mom Doesn't Know
balloonfista chapter 1 . 11/12/2012
Oooh, this is nice! I'm not going to pretend I completely understood it -but that just adds to its charm - and it made my stomach ache too :o


p.s. you're really funny xD I have almost as fun reading your authors notes as your stories lol!
frouwe chapter 1 . 9/24/2011
I think this is written beautifully. Like a poem-in-prose sort of thing. It really does feel like they're kids, because of how hard they try to keep it real and genuine and not let society get to them. Rather Peter Pan-esque, in my opinion.

I think it's perfect the length it is, and not really prologue-y. Though the ending did confuse me. I had to read the last part twice to understand it. For some reason I thought she was asking Jax for a retraction instead of her mother...?

I loved this line:

Glucose for short-term energy, Jax for long-term.
InkWitch chapter 1 . 9/22/2011
For some strange reason, reading this oneshot felt so... painful. It hurt in a strange way. I don't know why. I felt like my heart was breaking or something.

fairies and snapple chapter 1 . 5/13/2009
This is so, so cute and sweet and absolutely lovely. You're an amazing writer.
ohxrosie chapter 1 . 4/19/2009
OK this might not count as a good review. I mean, I liked the story. It was great and sad and kinda deep too. But I, being the silly person I am, just found your authors note way too entertaining.
Maplewing chapter 1 . 2/11/2009
This is so cute. :3

I love the names, and the whole thing is just... awesome. I liked it a lot, great job.
Kyllex chapter 1 . 1/26/2009
Why have I not read this yet? It was cute. And...different. I don't really know how to describe it. I liked the style it was in.

You always have the most interesting names for characters. Jax and Cadence? I mean, they're not bad, I like them. (: They're just unique. Which is cool, don't worry. Hah.

So yeah. I personally like the ending. And I also like dogs to be shorter than me. Because, well, if a dog were taller than me, then that'd be...REALLY SCARY.

Haha, I'm rambling. Anyway, talk to you soon?

-kyllex :D
Dot Cubed chapter 1 . 12/30/2008


anyway, no, i loved this. it has a very stream of conscious feel about it AND it's in the present tense, and i am such a sucker for both of those that it's probably ridiculous. like the present tense makes my life but i really can't explain why to anyone. it just does. idk.

anyway. this was just amazing. in a way i think jax is creepy and just not right for cadence, if that makes any sense? like with the whole stamp thing-he just seems very controlling and that's not very healthy. and cadence just goes along with it because she loves him so much, but i just feel like it's going to end badly, because of all the things she was mad at him for before, if that makes any sense.

so yeah. love this. and YOU. :)
meduse chapter 1 . 12/29/2008
I liked it.

No, I take that back.


Yes, I agree with you. It may be a TAD bit strange, but it's so wonderfully written. I was confused by the ending (and no, I don't mean that it seemed weird because they didn't get married and it didn't end with a perfect kiss).

Maybe you could explain the end to me? Because it's irritating me (no, no, your STORY isn't irritating's just that I want to UNDERSTAND it, you know?)

Anyway, sorry for the horrible review, but that's all I could think of...

*grins sheepishly*

found.eventually chapter 1 . 12/29/2008
Ooh. I liked this piece. The way it was presented. It's just about right. :)

And I loved that bit where he stamped his name all over her! It's just something that I can imagine a kid doing. And it's really, really adorable.

But I'm a bit confused about their age. Maybe clearing that bit up would make it even better?
JamieBell chapter 1 . 12/28/2008
I liked this, even though I wasn't quite sure what exactly was going on. But it was very nice.
Lily Llynn chapter 1 . 12/28/2008
It's so vague that it's a little confusing, and I agree that the ending is a little weird, but I do really like this. (: The writing is awesome, and kudos to the wicked monkey for adding this to our c2. (:
WithoutException chapter 1 . 12/28/2008

Just kidding.

This is cute.
mia5081 chapter 1 . 12/28/2008
I'm slightly confused...but I like it lol. When you said his name was suddenly on the back of her hand I was just like, wait! Is he a vampire or something? And then, no, it was just a stamp. See my confusion? But I think I'm confused because I just had some candy and I'm currently suffering from a short attention span.

And it does sounds like a prologue. It kinda leaves you hanging, wanting to know more.

Anyways, I like it so yay!

Hazelnut Romance chapter 1 . 12/28/2008
nice onshot.
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