Reviews for Bubblegum Pink
LaeLa chapter 1 . 7/7/2010
Oh i read another one of theese it was good :) your is good too :)
Rilan Morr chapter 1 . 3/15/2010
funny, i liked this a lot. great job!
R0ck3rAng3l4444 chapter 1 . 8/9/2009
loved ur fic chapter 1 . 3/31/2009
loved it ;)

It was entertaining in the sense of "sweet and short". I loved quite a few of his sentences and the way he perceived things, once again, your style of writing here was really interesting.

I'm just a bit sad because the story seems unfinished. I didn't find the ending satisfying. Not that they had to be a couple or something, but I just expected something more.
EchoedShadows chapter 1 . 1/29/2009
Awesomeness story! Really nice way to use the challenge. Never seen something even similar to this...
poppiesinoctober chapter 1 . 1/27/2009
Aw, okay, this was a really cute one shot.

I enjoyed reading it!

The editing was really good, cause I didn't see any mistakes that were horrible.

I've always wanted to do this challenge response.

Again, good story!



PS: Now I really want some bubble gum! ;)
B. J. Winters chapter 1 . 1/20/2009
I understand the openning line requirements, and I think it sets the stage. However, the first three paragraphs make the same point. I think you could delete some of this since I felt a bit like you were hitting me over the head. I actually rolled my eyes.

I would suggest that you move the "Just out of the blue one day" paragraph up to set the context sooner.

And in that paragraph I think you have a typo: There were at least three sits between them (seats?)

I loved the ending - particularly the "score". Very clever way to make a point and a bit true to life.
kte-wonderful chapter 1 . 1/13/2009
Nice job! I really like how the end gave a lot of room for the reader to make up what they want to think; maybe the gum popping DID still annoy the guy-or maybe it didn't! Hahaha. definitely a fun read. I liked your descriptions and the interaction between the characters. :) There were a couple conventional things I noticed, but they were small and almost unnoticeable. Good job!
AlmostCrazy chapter 1 . 1/11/2009
Nice, I liked it. It's really fun to read, for some reason, and is written in this light way that puts a smile on your face.
Vidavril chapter 1 . 1/4/2009
I really liked it! Congrats!
Lily Llynn chapter 1 . 1/2/2009
I actually like how they *didn't* end up as a couple. This was cute and very, very entertaining. Their reactions to each other are awesome. (: This was delightful and I loved it, and throw some serious love to the wicked monkey for adding this to our c2. (:
toffeecakesxox chapter 1 . 1/1/2009
Very funny! I love the fact that her chewing bubblegum turns him on, but he doesn't do anything about it; exscept stare, of course. Such a typical boy, even though he's a loner and all. :D

JamieBell chapter 1 . 1/1/2009
Cute and funny! Poor kid will be seeing pink and hearing popping in his sleep. Haha!
blurrylights chapter 1 . 12/31/2008
Cute..I wish there was more, but good job! :) Good luck with SkoW. :)
dimethylmercury chapter 1 . 12/31/2008
I really liked the way you showed their different aspects. Like, the both of them couldn't really be classified in a group, cause people aren't really like that in real life. I thought the whole fic was quite well written, following the prompt and all(: But I thought the last bit when they separated seemed too overused... As in '“Hey pinkie!” Her noticed her shoulders tense but regardless she turned around at the sound of his shouting out to her with one hand on her hip and a bemused expression. “I really hate pink bubblegum.”' I think with your writing, you could come up with something better(: Not meant to offend you in any way...
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