AH!

this was so good! i cant believe they are pared up for the assignment! update soon

What did Alex mean by saying not to go out with Zack?

really good. there are a few errors, but it was still really really good:D

hope you update soon

A good way to break up the action is to put in what the character is thinking or describe their surroundings. Like when she got sent out of the room and Alex appears straight away it kind of came from nowhere but maybe include her thinking about why she hates him so much and maybe how she's embarrassed he saw her in trouble.

Sorry if I've gone all yodaish. Hope this helps :)

I like the story but it's a bit hard to follow. Maybe a little bit of description between the dialogue? Otherwise, good storyline

Nice beginning. Sam seemed a bit cliched, but the narrative was pretty entertaining. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this!

-Apple (From the Roadhouse)

An interesting beginning. Sam seems the like the average sarcastic teen, lol, that's saying it in a good way. Her narrative is nice and somewhat humourous. The only thing that I found to be sorta repetitive was the parethesis. You could just simply make them a statement of their own.

Other than that, great chapter.

C.S.

Haha, this was a funny chapter~

I liked the whole competition thing.

There were a lot of typos in this chapter though, so I would make sure that you go and edit it.

Also, you shouldn't make your characters thoughts so cheesy. Like the hahahahahahahahahaha was a bit too much; only haha is needed.

So yea~

Good chapter. :]

-Jessie m p.s. pay it forwar e

This was a good chapter. :]

I like the whole idea of the competition thing. I can't wait to see what it's like. :]

I do wish you used a bit more description though, it would give the story more depth. Even so, this is a still a good story~

Onto the next chapter~

-Jessie m p.s. pay it forwar e

I really like this story. Your main character is a great narrator, and all of your characters are really realistic. I did notice a typo though, but nothing major.

The only thing I didn't like was the :p. I didn't find them to really be necessary, and I think they just make this seem less professional.

So yea~

Onto the next chapter.

-Jessie m p.s. pay it forwar e

Hellz yeahz for not watching Twilight! Yippy!

Thanks. As always, it's so funy. Did I mention it's funny?

Update Soon!

uh oh... i like alex alot! youre a good writer.

uh-oh. it is really well written. i want to know what is coming up so badly

why does he want to date em? that is just problematic for sam.

i like alex! really good job making the characters real. i like it