Reviews for Her Eyes, His Smile
LlamaLlamaNewt chapter 2 . 6/22/2009
Cold one in teh first chapter, Pre-Bella Edward in this chapter? Come on with the Twilight references darlin...

:P I'm over here to get away from Fan Fiction - jokes. But seriously, cool it with the Twilight. We love it, but it can get old.

good chapter though. One question: why can she navigatge so well? and she IS blind, right?
Nyca chapter 9 . 6/22/2009
ahaha. I see it is duled down. I like school right now 'cause before I was itching to see my friends but that would change in a couple of weeks. x)) well, FINALLY! the wolf pup has a name! why delilah? is it really coz of the song? ahaha, my dad would sing that song every karaoke party we go to. I still havent finishe my another chapters, really frustating been really busy. well, keep it up! cant wait 'til the next chapter! x)
anon again chapter 9 . 6/21/2009
I loved the banter between Wynn and Tristan in this chapter. Gah, that was made of win! Please pardon the pun, of course. This might've been covered in a different chapter, but how does Wynn know the color of her clothing? Or is that part of the narration that strays from her POV? Also, the chapter titles have lately been phases of the moon; I guess something big'll happen at the full moon? (...then again, that might've already happened; I'm not that familiar with moon phases) Lovely chapter, and looking forward to more! :)
Loveless Breath chapter 9 . 6/20/2009
I know, but everything seems backwards when it comes to my family. Well, I'm making brownies, so I'll review later.
Katherine-the-greate chapter 9 . 6/20/2009
Nice chapter. I love the puppy. :) I can't wait to see how this whole thing wraps up. and, what do you mean that you are ending it soon? There are a ton of threads that have been left loose for you to keep the story going on. so, please don't drop this quickly. and, will there be a sequal?
Obsession Changes Things chapter 9 . 6/20/2009
Wait do she just fell asleep on him while they were on the dance floor dancing? Random haha. Love it still. And love the whole well you smell great to me thing that was supper cute!

AAA chapter 1 . 6/16/2009
Wow, a very well written first chapter! Great description and zero grammar mistakes (as an English major, these irk me to no end). I look forward to reading the rest of this... keep writing! You blew me away, lol.
Julia Celeste chapter 8 . 6/16/2009
and the plot thickens. truthfully, i was on pins and needles waiting for this chapter. this has quickly become one of my favorite stories to read because it's a little unorthodox. i'm glad you've kept the suspense and mystery going. most authors by now would have revealed the big secret. i enjoy a little suspenseful torture. i can tell you one thing, this story is definitely NOT cliche, and it's so hard to find an original idea like this. i liked the insight into wynry's life and psyche. i'm also enjoying tristan's development. can't wait for more and post it soon!
anon chapter 8 . 6/15/2009
So I've been one of your ghost-readers. I apologize greatly for not having anything truly productive to say, but just wanted to say I am greatly enjoying your story. Kudos to you as well for incorporating Wynn's Japanese heritage without making her Mary-Sue, a common pitfall. The last chapter from Tristan's POV was delicious as well; at the mention of rules regarding his relationship with Wynn, I'd have thought him fae if not for the summary. Anyway, looking forward to future chapters! Especially now that Wynn knows he's not human, so hopefully the scene from the summary will occur soon. (and also because I can be a total girl at times and sadistically look forward to Tristan having some animal instincts for Wynn; UST and all that jazz...)
Obsession Changes Things chapter 8 . 6/15/2009

aferdeity chapter 8 . 6/15/2009
Yeah, I understand now. this was a nice chapter. I cannot wait for the last one. IDK why but for some reason her reasons for being messed up strike me as a little corny... but IDK why. Anyways update soon.
HighOnBrokenWings chapter 3 . 6/13/2009
Yeah... I was beginning to wonder how something so well written could actually have that many faults with her like seeing stuff, but not, if you get what I mean... Is she blind? I guess you wont tell me *Sigh*

And I was thinking that it was a lot like twilight... And it is hard to write a werewolf-vampire-human story that isnt like twilight, but yeah... Its really good :) Have you changed this from being in first person to third? Because there was still a few times where it said me instead of her.

I think that this would be really good as a first person story, but hey, thats just my opinion.
HighOnBrokenWings chapter 1 . 6/13/2009
Thata was a really good chapter, I loved the way how you introduced the character as the chapter went along, rather than having this big intro to them at the beginning. I was going to ask how many sibling she did have, but thats already been answered :D

I noticed that you switched into first person at one point:

" He stopped in front of a classroom and led me inside. She winced as my ears adjusted to the noise level"

There was a me and a my in there where it should have been hers.

Maybe you should have given more clues away to that she is blind. Like her staring at her laces doesnt really work. But then agan, saying that she is staring at something without actually seeing it could be considered rambling. Its funny 'cause Im trying to write a story about a girl with sight problems at the moment :P

I liked how you used third person so that we can see more than she does. Is the rest of it going to be in first? Or stay in third?

There was a few wee mistakes, but Im sure that I only noticed them 'cause Im freaky like that :)

Ive really enjoyed it so far :)
Nyca chapter 8 . 6/13/2009
ahaha. actually, NO it wasnt enough! joke. TOO MUCH ACTION! but that's okay. It was really fun reading this chapter, I mean I was like standing from my sit already. ahaha. suspense? well, yeah, you've made so typos but it's okay. I really agree with you with the moderators thing, as a fellow writer, you have a point! well, hope you update soon! nice chapter! brava! x))
Loveless Breath chapter 8 . 6/12/2009
I like reviewing, it's fun! I have a friend who is super smart, she knows, like, five languages fluently (including japanese) and she teaches me a bit. Yeah, most of what I know is from anime/manga/books too! ;) Nope, I'm not offended at all! :D No, I can't read braille, and not offended. I probably should learn though. I asked my mom once if i should learn and she got offended, lol. I think that's rather ironic. Eighth review! My brother looked at me like I was stupid for ten minutes when I asked him what a epipen was. Are they fairly new, or no?

Ganbatte! (it means 'you can do it!' in japanese)

Learning japanese writing is hard, because you have to translate symbols in japanese written and then translate that into English. I'm just trying to learn how to speak it first.
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