Reviews for Her Eyes, His Smile
Any08 chapter 3 . 6/12/2009
hm I think I have an idea of her being blind or not... Don't answer this question, I'm just posing it for the fun of it... Is it liek the movie daredevil? Where the main character can't see but through the sound being refracted off the objects he can see the shape?... *kind of like a bat using sonic waves to see* This book is wonderful (yeah small rendition to twilight but you are right about Stephanie Meyer having been through every vampire plot possible.
Any08 chapter 1 . 6/12/2009
She growled. “That only happened once, Alex, and it was entirely your fault!” she said indignantly. “You threw the door open and nearly broke my nose.” She remembered that day. It had happened not too long ago, only last year in fact. She had been walking back to her room when he had exited the bathroom as she walked by. Needless to say that she ended up with a black eye and a bruise on her forehead. He stopped in front of a classroom and led me inside. She winced as my ears adjusted to the noise level, but it did not last long because almost as soon as they had entered, the chatter began a rapid decline into total silence that had Wynn staring at the laces of her sneakers. Alex gave her teacher a slip and waited as he said, “Wynry Kinomoto, is it?”

You crossed by mistake from the third person to first person in this chapter. Had me a little confused...

I was highly upset though. I wanted to continue reading when I noticed that the story stopped! There are rarely any good stories that have me continue reading non-stop and this was definitely one of them. The story is extremely enticing!
Julia Celeste chapter 7 . 6/9/2009
i quite enjoy this story. some things you might want to fix are a few point of view changes (you jump from third to first sometimes), and there are also some verb tense mistakes (going from past to present). other than that, the characters seem to be developing well and it is an intriguing plotline. i look forward to reading more. and i will be sad if you don't update soon.
Loveless Breath chapter 5 . 6/8/2009
This is pretty cool because i just learned what an Epipen is! YAY ME! Good luck on future stories/Chapters, I'll keep reading.
Loveless Breath chapter 7 . 6/8/2009
Review, eight time...s? I think this is seven, does that count?
Loveless Breath chapter 6 . 6/8/2009
Ooh... different POV! Me likes.
Loveless Breath chapter 4 . 6/8/2009
Oh shit! He just totally came at her like that. I'm half-blind so i can kind of relate to how she feels. It's annoying when people hover. My mom keeps me in a bubble too. *pout* Oh well, haha! Keep writing.
Loveless Breath chapter 3 . 6/8/2009
I feel like a cat with a twitchy tail! I'll keep waiting for an update.
Loveless Breath chapter 2 . 6/8/2009
I love your use of japanese! Especially since I'm learning it, I'm having fun. Hehe... Keep Writing!
Loveless Breath chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
I actually all ready read this but i came back to review. I really like it, please continue!
kris89 chapter 7 . 6/3/2009
what does waxing crescent mean in reference to this chapter?
Katherine-the-greate chapter 7 . 6/2/2009
I like Zoey and the kiss from last chapter was well done. :) The coat part in the beginning of this chapter was cute too. Her memory is AMAZINGLY done. sad, but amazingly done. I was half hoping that Tristin would be there when she woke up...I like the way that they are getting along so well now. :) THey are already like a cute couple. I'm just guessing, but i could those two wolves be the two from the diner or are all the wolves there normal? The puppy showing up though, threw a monkey wrench into the flow for me. I mean, how is it really possible for a PUPPY to get out of her room, her house, down multiple roads that the bus took and to her cabin door? can you say super puppy? lol. it just doesnt seem plausible. Anyway, I can't wait to read more. I really love this story! please update again soon!
Katherine-the-greate chapter 6 . 6/2/2009
I liked seeing things from Tristian's POV this chapter. it was neat to see his view. the person in the tree has me wondering though. what/who is she? I can't wait to see what Tristian has to do and to find out about her past.

ps-in the last chapter i forgot to ask-what happened to the puppy when she woke up. it was no where in the story line except when she was thinking about talking to her parents and there was no mention of her seeing it in her room or anywhere else. i thought that Tristian might have taken it or something...
Katherine-the-greate chapter 5 . 6/2/2009
I love the part about the steak and the diner. it sounds wonderful. Again, i have some questions. One-i forgot to ask this last time, why does her dad make her take off her glasses at the table? two-how does she not become skeptical when they call her HUMAN? Three-does she possess some special gift of smell or sight? Four-was she born blind or did some accident make her blind?
Katherine-the-greate chapter 4 . 6/2/2009
I think the end of this chapter is really good. I love the puppy scene. I am a bit confused, as ever, by a few things. one-why he, the great protector, would throw her agianst a wall and dig his fingers into her wounds-shounds very non protective to me...two-how does he not notice the puppy?
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