Reviews for Innocent Seduction
Don't Poke Me chapter 1 . 9/24/2010
"A well rounded critique is often the most rewarding gift a reader can give . Please use this golden opportunity to offer a well deserved praise and/or tips for improvement."

Deserved Praises: yay to Bold Text 8D

Tips: Stay away from Joseph.
nul chapter 1 . 1/3/2009
I really like this, and think the way you wrote it is wonderful.

But she, the girl, doesn't sound like a five year old.

And I doubt that a five year old would start to have "feelings" or stuff like that for any guy.

I just think you should make her older. ten-ish or something.

Other than that, this was intruiging to read.

The summary was very simple, and that's what reeled me in.


Martin the Waterskier
Jade Lindsey chapter 1 . 1/3/2009
This was executed so well it disturbed me. I want to think of this man as a Perv but he doesn't really do anything to her to make him so.. I just cant fathom someone having an intimate connection to someone so much younger with nothing in common. I think you should explore their characters more and write more!
TwinkleHeart chapter 1 . 1/3/2009
that was really touching (