|Reviews for On the Outside|
| sea-of-serenity chapter 1 . 2/10/2009
I love this story. I especially like the flashbacks that tell the beginning of the story instead at just starting there. For example, when Will looked over the crib at his new baby brother.
I also love how Will loves his brother so much. It is so touching.
I already told you what I thought could be corrected in the e-mail and it looks good now.
Keep on writing, you are great.
| Lavender Quill chapter 1 . 1/25/2009
This was a lovely story. The way you portray Jayden as such a sweet boy boy is very good and the older brother is wonderfully aloof.
Once again your writing is amazing. And I am very impressed.