Reviews for My Soul Bleeds a Silent Hue of Blue
red clouds chapter 1 . 1/11/2009
Right, for a start, sorry about the late review!. My internet completely crashed and I just got it back.

Ok, down to business, I like the layout with the stanza's, it's quite effective. Another thing I like is the lack of "The" in the poem, as far as I can see it's only written twice. I think this helps to make it stand out from most other poems you might read. I'd also like to mention that when you write "Transparent forever still" It made me think a bit, because it could be read a number of different ways, just wondered if that was intended?

Red-Clouds

P.S. Thanks for the review, the capitalisation eRRorS get me every time. :P
Aipomking7 chapter 1 . 1/7/2009
That was just so amazing and beautiful. The imagry was vivid and precise and i really liked that. And thanks for commenting my poem. i usually right more darker ones but I was feeling happy that day lol. But anyways outstanding job and you should feel proud of yourself for that.
akasenko chapter 1 . 1/7/2009
hey...great poem...the emotions in the poem hit me like a rock to the face :P

One nitpick

"The night air utters my name or to my soul...Tears fall or rather rolls down my cheeks"

these lines break up the rhythm of the poem a little...if you could eliminate the "or" or break it into a couple lines it would be much smoother...

other than that..great work..
Sparxxx chapter 1 . 1/7/2009
This poem really makes its impact you can feel the pain of the person as you read about their pain and lose but then you notice that ray of hope at the end that alows you to let go of the pain
Farran chapter 1 . 1/6/2009
Well can't tell one what is happening that is more personal. However I can say this is a colleoction of enduringly beautiful yet macarbre and mournful images somthing that this pice shows as one of your streangthes and ending with the note of hope.

It reads like a bad dream, fear maybe? ending next to somone you love. A great pice keep writing.

Greg
LostInMe chapter 1 . 1/6/2009
I interpreted this very loosely: basically, it's a 'never give up' message. I'm not sure if that's how you meant it or if it's just how I see it. Great poem, by the way.
Shinigami Ringo chapter 1 . 1/5/2009
Hullo Blueberry~!

Nice chilling poem!

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