This was angsty and amazing! I loved it!

The simplicity of this is just gorgeous. Your language is lyrical and poignant.

"Cold as ice from winter’s breath" - I adore the personification there. It's one of my favorite things to use, and as such, is one of my favorite things to read. And yours was original and new.

And the technicality you used here was wonderful as well; I like the meter you used.

I really like this. It kind of makes me think, and...hurt.

I've often found that the poems we just come up with are the best we write. This was an astounding poem, and the simplicity of it seemed to add even more of an effect to it. It showed the simple yet complex views of death. Amazing piece of art.

Very nice imagery. I love dark poetry :D

Holli

Dude, this here is one of the best poems I've read on this site. Whoo man! I love the lines "Throaty noises chill my core," and "With each one a siv'ring gasp." I can imagine those sounds and the chill slowly seeping into one's soul. Awesome poem!

Keep it up and Hang Loose!

Wow. I am suprised I haven't heard of you before, your poems are beautiful.

ooh I shiver. That's what I got from reading the last line. It shows how a good writer you are that I actually feel what you're telling me.

Great work!

That was good! I love it when people shorten words. Like "shiv-ring"

So, thanks for the review. I'm kind of a recluse on this site, but, I checked out some of your stuff and I really like it. (: Most of the time, other people's poetry doesn't impress me, not to say that my own does, but, there's a certain rhythm and meaning I look for in even the most simple and small poems. I particularly like this one because I read way too much into everything, and, about 80% or more of the time all of my drawings and writings come to me from nowhere, like, the thing I had to write for english that I have up here, I initially wanted it to be happy. Apparently my pen did not. p But, I can see a lot of myself, or possibly, what I wish I was, in your writing already. Basically, this is a long drawn out way of saying "I like your stuff, kid". [ It has a really nice feel. And you don't need flashy insignificant words to make it any kind of better.

The mood is dark and foreboding, exactly the way you'd expect from the title. Good job.

And sometimes the best things come to you for no apparent reason.

Nice, vivid use of imagery to do with death. Quite a chilling piece.

Oh my goodness. Amazing imagery and word choicing. Brilliant.

Interesting piece. I liked it. :D

Interesting, I like the concept. The flow was very smooth, considering that you maintained a steady rhythm and rhyme throughout. A little too plain - I think maybe a flair of vocab here and there would spice it up a bit. I do like the 'shiv'ring', though :). The imaginary is decent, but you could possibly expand/elaborate upon it, with extra lines if you wanted to; the way it seems right now seems a little too common. I don't really get the "ears are held to block the rasp" - is it basically covering your ears to block out all sound? Overall, it's a nice piece but it could use with some polishing.