Reviews for Pilsburry Doughgirl
Isca chapter 1 . 1/16/2009
You took a cliche topic, and made it your own, so kudos for that!

The third stanza is incredibly well-written! The structure and diction is wonderful!

"It's amazing how she even fits into her chair." Poor girl! This is definitely a good example of the harsh reality of adolescent life!

"But the mullet at the front understands." I love that you ended the poem on a semi-happy note; perhaps, even with the potential of 'the mullet' becoming friends with 'the earthquake goddess'? I hope so.

:)
tangerine dreamer chapter 1 . 1/15/2009
i feel the awkwardness of this girl and also her desperate stab at being normal. your descriptions are very blunt, maybe uncomfortable to some, but it fits the topic at hand. i love the last line. nicely done!