EHH! I told you that you were an amazing writer! Bree, this is fantastic! I laughed so hard at the ending: I cleared my throat to say hello to my parents. What are Lea, Maggie and Joey? They're not vampires, are they? I thought of vampires when it said that Lea had topaz eyes, but vampires don't sleep or eat food. So...what then?

-Senseless Drive-

A.K.A. Lia

There were a couple technical problems I saw. Smaller numbers should be written out in fiction. Usually at least everything under one-hundred. Also, dialogue tags. You only end dialogue in a comma instead of a period if the next line is a continuation of the same sentence 'he said, she said' etc. If it's another sentence entirely, like "I frowned" then you end the dialogue in a period.

The ending was interesting and made me want to keep reading. She's eighty-seven and has parents who are still alive, and doesn't want to see them. Makes me want to read more to find out about it.

For the review marathon (link in my profile).