NO! RENA! that's so messed up! Rena was soo happy for once! i was so proud of her! she finally got adopted she gained a friend and a boyfriend her first kiss! Man! why?

this is really good! i can't wait to read the rest please update soon! please! please!

HI! Anastasia told me to read this story, and she also told me to credit her. I would, but I noticed some grammar mistakes. STEP YO GAME UP ASYA!

There was one in like the second chapter that was like "Marie was raping her hands around me." I think you meant to say wrapping, but it turned out as raping. *giggle*

Anyways, just when things were about to get good between Rena and Griffin, she just had to turn into a...thingy. Oh, is she gonna fall in love with some monster thing and dump Griffin? Did she really kill Marie? Oh, you better post the next one soon, cause I'm like dying here!

Wow this story is absolutly amazing. i was hooked from the prolouge. The plots great, the characters are great, and you even have bloodshed in there! I mean cmon it doesnt get any better then that!

You definatly have to keep going with the story. I gotta know what happens to Rena

WO! FIXED. Oh noess. What will happen to poor Rena now? Or is the end you cruel woman? I wonder why Rena is so special as to be able to enter a church? Maybe her intentions were innocent? Remember, he rubbed his OWN thigh. :-P

Gulp...

Nicely done! One or two punctuation/spelling mistakes, but other than that, the chapter seemed fine. Please update soon!

P.S. Poor Marie! (not to mention poor Rena)!

Hay guys, Wren Raven here, I'm sorry this chapter cuts off randomly in the middle, some thing is wrong with the download and I can't seem to get the rest of the story up even if I C&P it onto the existing document. I am in the process of fixing it and with any luck the rest of it will be up tomorrow. If anyone knows why this might be or how to fix it, I would appreciate some advice. Sorry for the inconvenience!

Oh noes.I didn't get first comment.I fail in life and as a awesome story. Seriously, Griffin is like the man. He's such a hero, saving Rena from the evil high school preps. My favorite character thus far.

Oh noees. I wasn't the first reviewer. I fail as a friend. Awesome story. And Griffin? He's such a hero. Saving Rena from the horrors of high school preps.

I like it! It's creative and original. The plot is really inventive-seriously, I've never even heard of a book with a similar idea, and I've read a lot of books! It's fairly well written, just one or two small punctuation mistakes. Other than that, great story!

Hi there!

I like the plot that you've got here. It isn't everyday that people are chosen to be villains, you know! ;)

However, you might want to consider editing these chapters a little bit, and playing around with the way you space paragraphs. A reader might feel very intimidated by being faced with such a wordy chapter.

Sincerely

Caramir

(By the way, be sure to check out the Review Marathon- link in my profile)

WOW! this story is really...wow! you got me hooked from the prologue. while reading both chapters all i could do was smile and that means it's really really good! - you MUST continue this story... and when you do i will be there!

This is a pretty awesome read. I like the plot and everything! Evil's point of view. Nice. I hope you updates soon since this is rad, and I really have no idea what's going on with Griffin besides the fact he likes Rena. But i mean is he supposed to be the hero, or is he just normal. Will Rena learn that she is indeed evil during the eclipse? It would be funny if nothing happened then, but happened like the next day or something... I dunno. But it would be major cool if it happened in the next chapter. Anyhow, Happy Writing!