|Reviews for Likened to a Liquid Lash|
| Marquise d'Horreur chapter 1 . 1/17/2009
Wow,that was amazing. Wonderful,beautiful descriptions,and the ending genuinely surprised me. I found a few minor mistakes (like,at one point,it says 'women' instead of 'woman'), but...this story is still great. Awesome job, keep up the good work.
| Nicki BluIs chapter 1 . 1/17/2009
Beatles, babe, this is fabulous! That's what vamp stories should be: sexy and gory for no reason! Although I think you needed to add a lil more gore to it. The eroticism was great but on the first reading I didn't even realize she was dead. Maybe you should extend the "snap her neck". Either make a metaphor/simile out of it or give vampy a lil time to reflect over his prey?
Also: is this a habitual thing? Like does he go around and do this to a lot of women? If so make that clear. Cuz the only thing more horrifically-erotic than a homicidal vamp is serial killer vamp ;P
Um… what else? Oh! You have typo somewhere in the beginning. You wrote women instead of woman.
Okay that's all don't forget to tell everyone how mean my review was :P