hahhahahaha!

this is fab xD

please update soon?

First off, I think you should delete the "Jess's POV" at the beginning, it was kind of an eye sore for me, and it detracted from your beginning which was very well done. I liked how you started off with a question and worked the extra information into the story in an organic manner.

"Her brown hair, graying slightly, was pulled back in a loose bun with stray wisps surrounding her high cheek bones and piercing green eyes." I loved the description, it was well thought out and controlled. Though I think "Piercing green eyes" was a little cliche. Maybe delete that line, or use a metaphor to get the message across a little clearer.

Ex: "Eyes that could pierce armor."

I would recommend easing off the adverbs (ex: I said softly, she looked curiously). They kind of detracted from the flow (at least in my opinion).

"I think I stopped breathing."

I loved this. It was a wonderful image to end a chapter on. It was poignant, short and very powerful.

This was a nice chapter, but a little more description and imagery would make even better (like what you did when you described the receptionist).

You don't need to tell the reader the POV because your character has a strong voice so the readers will be able to differentiate between the characters.

Nice work.

Oh my god! Amazing! The diction of each character is absolutely perfect! I just love the idea of dancing! It is so romantic...but is it really necessary for the all the friend connections? Anyways, awesome story and update soon!

this is a great story, i wish the chapters could be abit longer though lol

update soon (:

I absolutely adore this story. I wish you would update more because I just can't get enough of it.

Update soon!

~Bubbly Girl

Nicely done, good way to find out about their lives and solve the boyfriend thing. Can't wait for the dancing.

JM

Ahaha Jacob is so cute.

great story! i love the way that jacob and jess fit together. please update soon!

ah i was so excited when i saw the update! i lovee this story:D i'm also excited to see what happens when she transfers to Chilton, can't wait for more!

ahaha iwas giggling the whole chapter

especially the part when Jacob found out who bruce is :D

from that point on... just beautiful _

wow...

i love dancing..

this could be the next Step Up movie... ]

Aw he's jealous, how cute!

aw

please please update soon

i cant wait when they go to school or another dance lesson

aw i love this story