your writing almost surpasses tolkien. almost. finish the next chapter plz

NOOOOOOOO! It cant end here! UUUUUUHHHGGG!

Very nice, but yer taking yer own sweeeeeeet Long time to write it. On the other hand i'd rather have it take a while then to be sloppy. I'm writing a book so i know how it is. If you wanna read it there is a problem though: Its in German. LOL (I'm swiss)

Read it the first couple chapters through again. I noticed a couple of misspellings that disrupt the story

(missing letters, mispellt words that sorta thing)

Awwwww Dim is so cute. I'm VERY happy that you put a link an your deviant art page otherwise i never would have found this. Thanks;)

Omg this is sooo funny i read it like 10 times. LOL

Ok but i noticed a blank spot. Here: Some of the bodies were mangled beyond recognition, but there were some among them that even Min had known. It was a... It stops there. Can you fix that?

Weasels get bad rep. Always. It would be funny if there were lemmings from the land of the weasels that escape and come help defeat the weasels. Too bad you take writeing seriously.

Good chapter, I think it has a differant tone than the others. This is a good shift considering that now they are in the midst of a terrible war.

You're alive!

I was just thinking about this story the other day and wondering where you'd got to.

Min is growing up! Excellent. Question: Why can't Lupus talk in full sentences? Is it a wolf thing - something about their anatomy that doesn't let them learn to talk, or some such thing?

Yes this is realy good, you are realy developing these caracters a lot. I hope that Dim has a great future as well as Min, but that might be asking for too much.

I can't wait to find out what the king is going to do when he finds out. mabe he will throw a hissy fit. HAHAHAHA

I thought that Min was going to take dim prisoner for real... but maybe I'm clueless by nature. I want to know more about min and this psychological thing dim is describing. Very interesting, great chapter. I laughed at the inkeeper thing last chapter. That was hiarious - Dim his sister.

Cool chapter. Dim is going to get in a lot of trouble, isn't she? and Min, for that matter. I like that you gave them both names that mean "small" in some form or another.

I'm quite confused about Salooki. Is he a dog? If so, what breed? Why do they call him a barbarian?

Hey afalstein, noticed you weren't getting many reviews, so I thought I would set up an account and comment.

First of all, this is great, much better than anything I've ever attempted to do with fiction. It's a fairly involved story and you seem to have put a lot of thought into the world these creatures live in, and their history.

The only thing I would say is that Dimina needs a sub-plot of some kind. She's an interesting character, and she's sort of like the ?foil? of Minimus' character. But she's so bored all the time, that you have got to work to make sure that the readers aren't as bored as she is.

Maybe play off of her relationship with Ragas more. Maybe she helps him in some way, gives him medicine or food or something. Maybe they have something quirky in common, like they both play chess. or maybe Ragas tells her more about the paintings in the castle, what characters they are.

I also am thinking it'd be a great picture (with words or colored pencils): the two of them talking. Just such a visual contrast, the way that you've described them.

I'm back, I'm back, I'm back!

It seems someone's been racking up the reviews! yay!

Ah, let's see...

I had stuff to say, I really did, but I think i forgot while i was reading. Now i feel like I'm wasting this review, so i have to come up with somethingg interesting to say.

It was really good, just like always.

I like the random weasel, and the poor little ferrets.

Oh, reminds me though, there were a few little grammar/spelling mistakes. Not many though, never are with you.

Oh, and I love Dim. Lovelovelove her. She's so cute.

Can't wait til the next chapter! I'll be on time reviewing next time :)

Oh! Is this the "bad guy" you promised? Wow. He's evil!

I HOPE there's more than one reviewer. This story is certainly worth the time.

Now that I have an accurate idea of your characters' appearance, I can imagine them really well. Thanks for the reference.

I really like the way you're featuring both sides of the story. I may be wrong in this surmise, but it seems like the trouble would be resoved fairly easily, except that some very important people are very stupid or irresponsible (read Fil). I also like that you didn't stick with the typical "doggood/catbad" idea. I haven't decided who the real "bad guy" is yet, but I like having a well-rounded view of characters. It makes it more fun, even if it is more confusing and you find yourelf liking the villain.

Princess Dimina is so cute. I like the way she plays her father, but knows when to stop. I REALLY hope Fil doesn't do something stupid, though I get the feeling he's going to eventually be captured and a trade of prisoners will be negotiated.

Great chapter. Can't wait for the next one!