Reviews for Pain
lahunnybee chapter 2 . 1/27/2009
WOW! I sort of like this one better. Even though the ending it changed, to something not so much depressing nor is it happy. It's kinda of neutral if that's the word I should use. Keep up the good work. I enjoy reading these types of poems.
lahunnybee chapter 1 . 1/27/2009
This is true on so many levels. I adore the ending of this one. Since, it is true... when I'm depress, once it goes away without me noticing, I wonder why or even how I sunk that low. At least that was what I was feeling while reading. You could've been conveying a different meaning. Anyways, it was a nice read.
LostInMe chapter 2 . 1/20/2009
The flow is pretty good, but the lines "Faster and Faster, as I fear/That it will burst from this fleeting" are a bit lengthy for this poem, so I'd suggest editing that part. Otherwise it's great!