|Reviews for Into the stark white void|
| Katie Nicole chapter 1 . 1/26/2009
I noticed your religious (or unreligious) poems are often very biting.
Good for you.
This is great, by the way [: I love when you can get a feel for the author's true opinions and emotions through their writing - when it's not just a character, but truly the author, and there's no way to disguise that.
One thing I noticed that I was very proud of! (Proud of you AND of myself - for noticing - haha.)
"I am saturated in a new truth
one which was supposed to free the mind and
stave of oppression, instead I find myself
oppressed by my own sense of reality
possessed by my new outlook, and
depressed by my own lack of worth"
Is VERY existential.
Ohh, you can get me started with this one.
I don't know how much you know about the existentialists - maybe more than me - but if you don't know much about existentialism, I suggest you read up, buddy, cause it's super interesting and I bet you would really like it.
I actually started reading this book in Barnes & Noble, and wound up buying it, called Existentialism for Dummies, haha.
It's really great!
Okay, enough rambling.
I also loved this simile:
"and to smash open like a rotten apple against the pavement"
Wonderful, lovely, gorgeous, great :D :D
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 1/24/2009
The last two lines of this are really good. And I like how as the poem continues, it reveals more and more about you, and does feel like a literal stripping of a mask. Very nicely done. Keep writing! :)