This is truly an absolute gem! I am thoroughly enjoying the protagonist’s inner dialogue and thought processes. Also it kicks off with well…a normal event, leaving a bar, yet the way you write it makes it so ridiculously interesting! I truly am enjoying this.

Also, so many works of fiction utterly fail describing a love interest, but not you. This line was HILARIOUS and also the perfect segway into that exact necessity that most writer’s fumble: ‘ Let me describe him to you so I can give reason to my plight. ’

I am loving this!

The crazy rambling inner dialogue makes for a hilarious story. I really enjoyed it.

Hahaha. Nice opening. Great conversational writing carries us right into his pace and gives insight to his character and voice.

hahahahaha your story was so funny

I absolutely love this story! Gonna go check out your other ones for good reads. :)

Suprisely i love it and here i thought was going to bw annoying like some others but your was so funny and cute x

First, I wanna give you my congratulations for this story! Are amazing! :)

Second, I want to ask you about chance to translate it to Spanish. I saw is a free story for all people, and I want to give chance people can't read in English could read these books in Spanish.

I don't ask for pay or something like that. I just ask for your authorization for do it.

In this moment, I'm translating K.A. Merikan's free book. "Blood. On the Rocks". They got me their authorization to do it; of course, I let people now is a story that belongs to they. H.B. Pattskyn give me chance to translate her free story "Encantado" too. I did it now. Also I finish to translate "Friends and Lovers?" by Sara York, "To steal the tithe" by Laylah Hunter and "The Maze" by Tia Fielding. She give me the chance to translate "The Maze" and "The great escape". Other authors who give chance to translate their free-stories to Spanish are Celya Kyle (to translate "Joy & Pain"), Kim Fielding (to translate "The gig"), Kay Berrisford (to translate "Prisoner of the mountain watch"), Jeff Erno (to translate "Invisible" and "With this ring"), Luwa Wande (to translate "The cross and the black"), Kyle Adams (to translate "Dirty Zero" and "Dirty Hero") and Z.A. Maxfield (to translate "When Angels Fall").

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omygod this was fucking good and hilarious... i almost pissed myself because i was laughing so hard xd...:) i love it

I was feeling bored, needed a story to read, got curious after reading the summary so started reading this story, and I liked it...

Yay, finish. Good ending for a good story, really really good story :-)

This is so fanny I couldn't stop from reviewing it or making it my favorite, I'd love to continue reading even if it's midnight, have to wake up before 8:30 and in less than a week I have my final exams, I can't stop my self when I love something.

I like this already!

I'm liking this story, but holy crap is Jay spaz-tastic.

"I'm the girl of the relationship and all that. Something to do with ukuleles." that was one of my favorite lines, so damn funny xD i loved jay's random ramblings, they were epic! i'm totally in awe with you for coming up with all of them xD

on a more serious note...i'm glad he slapped seth in the end, it made me really happy that he didn't let him call him an idiot like that )

thank you for sharing, had me laughing i don't know how many times and thus made my evening -

Just wanna tell you that I like this and gonna read the sequel NOW. ;P