You should write a short story about it. Those are some amazing lyrics!

O.O wow. thats it, wow. awesome.

~hehe, kitty. Thats Me!

"A sweet melody

A sour sound"

Lovely lines :D

Heh the story makes a lot more sense now, or at least can really see from this how it came to be. I rather liked the lyrics. Tis a shame you can't actually hear the tunes for songs on here. That would be rather neat. *nods*

lol. I really liked it... so much that I read it, sang it, and sang it again :D

It would be cool if you had music for it. I like it.

That was great! I also read the short story that goes with it & they go wonderfully together. I could definitely see this being a favourite song of mine if it had a tune. (:

Awesome! This is one of my favorite songs that you've written. A really important part of music and writing is that different people interpret differently what you write and are able to relate it to their own life. I think you did that perfectly here.

Just one thing, in verse 3 in the fourth line, you typed feel to the ground instead of fell to the ground.

Great lyrics :D

I love this song! :D Its really good, keep going. I lvoe dark stuff like this :)

i liked the verse 1, it was a beautifully way to start and it kept the theme throughout the song. Loved it!

I really like this! It flows really well as a song! Really interested in hearing what it sounds like! x

I really liked it! And a short story sounds cool :)

I'm guessing it's a song and it might work with music, but just the words by themselves are a bit repetitive. The line that stands out most for me is 'a sour sound' - I like the taste of it.

i love it soo much! I wanna write the tune for it so badly. Now i can't decide if I'll write the tune for "This Mirror" or this one first...BOTH! YAY!

I've always loved songs/stories about music. Music Love. Love Life. That is my way of life. I don't know how you'd make this into a story, but I'd still love to see lael1bologna create ANOTHER masterpiece. Happy writing!

- strobeXlightXstatic