I love how you described this!

ahh, I just re-re-read this for the 5th time I think. Amazing. And it was good to read it in one clean break. I have to say, the chapters with Luce and Lil are the best. I found myself skimming the other chapters- but the story is amazing. I continue to marvel at its imagination and sheer sense of creativity and fantasy. It really is a new world come alive with culture, creatures, and dreams abound. This story is absolutely brimming with ingenuity and I can't wait for part 2! UPDATE SOON!

I love this story and i know that though it gets better each time you write it, i hope you don't get so caught up in rewriting it that you forget to update. basically, i hope you keep on updating and the amazing writing.

Wow this is very dark! By the way the girl from school was that normal range of powere becuase she seemed very strong

LOVED!

Hi! I just wanted to let you know that I loved your story! I didn't read the first draft, but this draft is amazing. I lovelovelove Lily and Lucien

if you get published for the entire series...

im going to buy all of the books!

and if they make a movie...

i WILL own the poster lol i read through the entire rewrite from start to finish and i was always exited when you put up a new chapter! i really hope you get published!

sincerely, kt-twilight

Wow this is one of the nest stories have ever read:O

Lol, how cute.

the sequel sounds like fun.

Sounds Brilliant! Can't wait.

oh wow. that last part, and especially that last line leaves so much to think about!

update soon! :D

Wow that was really good. A brilliant ending to what is one of the best stories that I have read on Fiction Press so far. I am more than anxious to be reading the next installment to this, I need to know what is going to happen. Well done on such a brilliant job.

i can not wait for the next one you've left so much to be answered i relize that you want to go back and edit more but, be it a shelfish hope, get to the end of the story thats only becasue i crave the story so much though...can't wait to so more

~me

I'M SO EXCITED FOR THE NEXT BOOK!

!1!SHIFT!ONE!1

OH MY GOD.

I FUCKING LOVED IT! I didn't comment on the last chapter but I will comment on the story as a whole. I read somewhere that you are a storyteller, not necessarily a writer. I think you're both- and love it! I read for the same reason you write- to meet new characters, to get transported to a new world and to fall in love with the cultures, the newness of it all, the mysticism that surrounds everything. I can not WAIT for the second book- it sounds SO EXCITING! And I hope you don't make Luce and Lillith suffer too much. This chapter, literally, is one of my favorites. The writing is exquisite as always but the emotions, the sense of rythmm, the depth! I LOVE IT! I really don't know how many more ways I can say I love this story. You probably will have to take down the first book and I hope that you can find an agent and get published! I know its a very trying but ultimatly rewarding experience and I wish you the best of luck. I don't know if you know of her but there was an author (Amanda Hubbard) who started off here at FP and now her book comes out in a few days so find her on fp, fb, her blog, etc. and ask her if you have any questions about publishing and all that. Hers really is an amazing story- she got rejected around 50 times but now her book is coming out in stores across the US, Canada, etc. I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SECOND BOOK1! You will be posting that here right? And when do you think you will start posting that? Give me the 411! I wish you the best of luck and I LOVE this chapter! A flustered Luce is amazing..ah, I love him. Ugh and please don't let Lillith get married for real! I couldn't stand it. I can't wait to see Luce's reaction. You're completetly write about the dates- I thought I would want to see the first date or where they get naked or kissy kissy hahah but this is 0248209483029b times better. You really have a way with words. LOVE IT! AND UPDATE SOON!