Reviews for The Slave of Heaven Book One
C. Elizabeth chapter 47 . 6/10/2009
I absolutely loved your story. You're by far one of the best writers on FictionPress. Not only is everything grammatically correct and well written, you have an excellent and heavily researched story line. And don't worry about the numerous drafts - I had a Writing professor who said that the average published author wrote 5 to 10 drafts of a book. The only critique I could find about your story was the rock star thing. It's not a bad idea, it just doesn't really carry throughout the rest of the book. It's kind of forgotten about halfway through. But really, amazing story. I can't wait to buy the published copy!
Imagination's Dust chapter 49 . 6/10/2009
I'm really looking forward to this. Would definitely buy this in a bookstore. _ Most vampire stuff is so terribly done now it gives me nausea, but I'd make an exception for Lucien and his UHaul. XD

- HT
readaholicxxx chapter 48 . 6/10/2009
good luck!
M.Bianca chapter 49 . 6/10/2009
I was actually expecting you to say something about her father getting the venom out. not that I'm disapointed, don't get me wrong! and it's good that you put some music in there, it helps remember that this vampire is also a musician, not just some princeling. well done!
Anna chapter 49 . 6/10/2009
Oh, wow. That was a great chapter. I can't wait for the second book!

You have a great imagination and, in lack of a better way to describe it, a wonderful personal relationship with your characters. I really enjoyed reading your book, even if it was a rough draft. Keep up the good work. :D
Somedaymydreamswillcome chapter 49 . 6/10/2009
One word: Wow. I loved this chapter. That date was amazing. :D Can't wait for book two it sounds rambunctious! :)
midnight84118 chapter 48 . 6/10/2009
cool i will be withing for the next book
readaholicxxx chapter 47 . 6/10/2009
oh my goodness i can't believe it's finished i can't wait for the sequel
M.Bianca chapter 47 . 6/9/2009
this was absolutely great! have you ever thought about publishing it? and are you ever going to post a sequel of some sorts?
lorna chapter 47 . 6/9/2009

if i ever see this story in paper and ink, im so buying and recommending to my friends!

love it, please continue!
Daisies4no1 chapter 47 . 6/9/2009
Perfect! This was one of your best chapters and it was absolutely the best way to end this book. I can't wait for the next book, keep up the amazing writing )
Maelne chapter 47 . 6/9/2009
I love it! :) You're going to have a sequel right? This story is a perfect mix of imagination, fantasy and romance. I feel like it should be a published book! :)
KiraLove chapter 47 . 6/8/2009
Is there going to be more?

-Kira Love
Annabel Wynters chapter 47 . 6/8/2009
OMG! I Loved it immensly!

That was the perfect ending, it left me craving for more! I will definately read the next one, and when this DOES get published, count on a fangirl staying I read this first when you come to the states or anywhere at one of your book signings. You've come so far with this story and your writing that its amazing!

I hope you keep your writing up, it's definately your calling among may things.

good luck

debatablywonderful chapter 47 . 6/8/2009
What a great conclusion to an amazing story. Now I seriously can't wait for your sequel - the dates! lol. i'm sure they'll be a blast! you write enviably well. when i read your chapters it's like a film playing inside my head. i can picture everything! everything from your characters to your environments are so very well articulated - you pick up on all the little details that some writers forget to include but which really just bring the scenes to life.

My opinion of nephilim men has went right down the tubes though (with the exception of her brother) in this chapter! - they way they treated her! they really have absolutely no respect for their women do they? i'm in conflict with how i feel about her father. I was sincerely touched by the reunion between Lillith and him. The scene was very well written - not too dramatic, not too sappy like - and to finally see him actually act as if he cares for her was good to see. it was clear that the man was desperate to get her back and there was something so poignant about how he reacted, with the obvious relief causing him to cry. I know that this is probably how any parent would react, but to read it about a man who was so stoic and unfeeling before...that's probably what gave it extra impact actually.

BUT! he sounds like a nasty piece of work lol.

"As the gondola rounded the corner I could’ve sworn I saw the moonlight dancing on the naked blade of Johannes’ sword." I have to admit, this was a pretty chilling line lol.

And how could they let that girl do that? Aislynn? How could her FATHER let her do that? disgusting. are women just dolls to these men? do they have no regards for their feelings whatsoever? argh! i just really, really, REALLY want someone - preferably a woman (Lilith) to tell them all where to stuff their pretty ideals (which will hopefully be coined with a hearty good kick to their balls).

and as much as i want Lucien and lilith to get together, i'm glad that she's not giving in so easily. teach him that he can't just charm his way to winning her affection! (and yeah, i'm in a bit of a feminist mood tonight).

There's just something so real about your story - regardless of the supernatural stuff obv. (which you incorporate very well into the 'normal' human world btw) - that makes it hard not to be completely obsessed with it., it helps that your vampires sound like right fitties.

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