OMG! I Loved it immensly!

That was the perfect ending, it left me craving for more! I will definately read the next one, and when this DOES get published, count on a fangirl staying I read this first when you come to the states or anywhere at one of your book signings. You've come so far with this story and your writing that its amazing!

I hope you keep your writing up, it's definately your calling among may things.

good luck

Lena

What a great conclusion to an amazing story. Now I seriously can't wait for your sequel - the dates! lol. i'm sure they'll be a blast! you write enviably well. when i read your chapters it's like a film playing inside my head. i can picture everything! everything from your characters to your environments are so very well articulated - you pick up on all the little details that some writers forget to include but which really just bring the scenes to life.

My opinion of nephilim men has went right down the tubes though (with the exception of her brother) in this chapter! - they way they treated her! they really have absolutely no respect for their women do they? i'm in conflict with how i feel about her father. I was sincerely touched by the reunion between Lillith and him. The scene was very well written - not too dramatic, not too sappy like - and to finally see him actually act as if he cares for her was good to see. it was clear that the man was desperate to get her back and there was something so poignant about how he reacted, with the obvious relief causing him to cry. I know that this is probably how any parent would react, but to read it about a man who was so stoic and unfeeling before...that's probably what gave it extra impact actually.

BUT! he sounds like a nasty piece of work lol.

"As the gondola rounded the corner I could’ve sworn I saw the moonlight dancing on the naked blade of Johannes’ sword." I have to admit, this was a pretty chilling line lol.

And how could they let that girl do that? Aislynn? How could her FATHER let her do that? disgusting. are women just dolls to these men? do they have no regards for their feelings whatsoever? argh! i just really, really, REALLY want someone - preferably a woman (Lilith) to tell them all where to stuff their pretty ideals (which will hopefully be coined with a hearty good kick to their balls).

and as much as i want Lucien and lilith to get together, i'm glad that she's not giving in so easily. teach him that he can't just charm his way to winning her affection! (and yeah, i'm in a bit of a feminist mood tonight).

There's just something so real about your story - regardless of the supernatural stuff obv. (which you incorporate very well into the 'normal' human world btw) - that makes it hard not to be completely obsessed with it.

...plus, it helps that your vampires sound like right fitties.

;)

ah-ma-zing! is all i got to say!

:]

wow

are you going to write a sequel?

hope to see the second book wane you get it out...O and great job

OMG thats the ending. I mean dont get me wrong its brilliant but there so better be a sequal :D

i don't want it to end, i cant wait for you to start writing the second book. Keep up the good work.

Awesome work as always. Can't wait to rad more. You are continuing this tomorrow right? o_o Brilliant story but as I said before, FP is so not the place for it.

I love love LOVE this story! And u call this your draft :p haha I can't wait for more.

ah i was wondering how you could possibly finish in one chapter xD

I like it :D

looking forward to the next one!

small typo

"I’m of a study stock" (sturdy)

ek! please update! I'm begging you...

I really need a new, brilliant chapter to read! I think hundreds of other people need it too!

I can't wait to find out what happens... and the dates with Lily and Luce... ek! I love you.. lol seriously you are like the coolest person ever to create such a brilliant story like this... lol I love Rune's personal message at the end of his letter... The parasite insists that I write something personal, so that you know that I am alive and well. How is your face, my little half-frog? I can only hope that my kiss has eased some of the pain.

i love the half-frog bit... and how Luce was jealous of the kiss...

lol I love it SO much.

I don't know if you've noticed, but you keep switching up from Angela to Helena for vampire blood addict. and it's very confusing.

Also, is Lily's brother fond of her? Because the things he does to Lily like the touching isn't very brotherly. More like molesterly.

YAY! I am in love with this story! Thank you so much for updating! It just made my day.

Amazing i started to read your story in the morning and read it all till now(except the potty breaks..lol). but i wanted to tell you how i feelt about your story.A-M-A-Z-I-N-G! i love it! lol. i cant wait for the next chapter and the third pass, its always cool tosee how a story evolves!

so much love, and keep up the awesome work!

wXl

only one more chapter?

(and dont worry about it. i loved reading it again :D)

i love this story!

even if her belittling herself gets on my nerves (alot!)

i cant wait for the next chapter!

thanks for writing :)