Reviews for The Slave of Heaven Book One
gert chapter 35 . 1/13/2010
Ryann,

I love this story.

I know I have a lot more to go, but

I had to comment. I love your writing.

You are so detailed that a person can

visualize the places and people you are writing about.

Loved the banter between Lucien, Lancelot and the twins.

Thank you for writing and I am off to start the next

chapter.
Lily chapter 52 . 1/2/2010
Ah! I'm like so happy! Ha. I can't wait until the next book, I'm so enthralled by it :) I will seriously buy the book when (not if) it gets publshed! :P it's really great to hear that ur life is going pretty good. Congrats on ur thesis and engagement! Ah u r so cool. Lol. Love u!
Chocorange888 chapter 49 . 12/28/2009
I'm sorry about not reviewing earlier on in the story, but when I discovered it today I just couldn't stop reading. It's absolutely amazing, and I felt the way that it developed was something really rare, as it just all seem to roll together. The sneak preview was beautiful, I'm glad you managed to give Lucien more emotions and explore his feelings properly, because I thought he was just a kind of grey area all through the first book. Thank you and well done.
InsaneLogic chapter 52 . 12/28/2009
From what I've been told from literary agents (and no rumors since I did get into publishing myself) some of them don't want to know you've already posted yoru whole story up somewhere. To them, it might mar the rights of "first publication". Others will like knowing there is definitely some commercial benefit - because nowadays, a lot of agents look for mainstream stories simply because they're commercial, not because they were written well.

I gues you could go with something like saying you posted a bit of the story online for feedback and got a very positive response, but query letters are generally meant to be solely to explain your book and nothing they might see as vanity can be in it. But some agents are different and they want to hear how some readers might have already seen your book. I've never tried to contact a publisher directly, since most of them deny unsolicited queries, so I can't say anything on that. Hope this helped though. You have an awesome storyline here and it definitely needs to go out there (and hopefully raise the falling cumulative literary IQ of books on the shelves).

- HT
bela13 chapter 52 . 12/28/2009
good luck :) i can not wait to see this in stores
TymCon chapter 52 . 12/28/2009
Lol i didnt expect a new book:P Im excited:D If you want my advice if your going to delete this, keep the first chapter so you have proof that you brought this out first. You have no clue if someone copied or pasted this. Ya know? Well anyway ill read it later:P
CassandraStacy chapter 52 . 12/28/2009
Ek! This is so exciting! Of course, I should probably go back and reread the first book so I remember all that happened. I can barely keep my eyes open tonight, but I'll be sure to read the first chapter tomorrow when I wake up. I'm excited about Book two!

Cassandra
J.L. Lofthouse chapter 51 . 12/26/2009
congratulations!
I. N. Wexham chapter 51 . 12/23/2009
Sorry couldn't be bothered to log in but.. congratulations and I hope that everything is well with you!
J.L. Lofthouse chapter 49 . 12/21/2009
wow, that sounds brill, he is falling in love with her! i really can't wait for the story to continue, hope it does soon, plaese keep me updated its a wonderful story, and very detailed, i love it.
J.L. Lofthouse chapter 47 . 12/20/2009
i have said this before, but i love this story, it is amazing! i love the very last bit, telling everyone that this is just begining, i can't wait for the rest! Briliant work :)
emmaruby chapter 51 . 12/20/2009
I have to say I love love LOVE this story.

I just couldn't stop reading it!

Can't wait to see what happens next and I really hope you get published.
J.L. Lofthouse chapter 20 . 12/17/2009
i have been meaning to review on this story before, but i haven't had the time to do so. I just wanted to let you know that this is and absolutly amazing stroy. I love the amount of detaling and emotion that has gone into it. it is fantastic, at the end of each chapter im draged to the next, seriously. The amout of detail and emtion, is outstanding. the plot is briliant, it makes you want to read more, to find out what is going to happen, and why all these strange things keep happening to her. It is briliant and i love it to bits. The diffrent races, the rockstar vampire, her father seems so stricked, that it made me want to cry on how he talked to her for the first time in the story, Alec seems like a very intresting character and, to me, seems like he likes his sister a more than he should, but that is just me. it is a fab story and i can't wait to find out what happens.
readaholicxxx chapter 51 . 12/15/2009
aw congratualtions! That's so romantic-how did you react?
A Written Way chapter 51 . 12/15/2009
congratulations!

and thanx for the update, looking forward to the next book! :DD
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