Reviews for The Slave of Heaven Book One
TymCon chapter 51 . 12/14/2009
Lol how romantic:D Hope you have a good marriage or wedding. I duuno how to wish luck when someone get engaged:P you should send them to literary agents. I dont think they'll just block all mail from you if they dont like it. They will just tell you what dos'nt work, or not reply. If you dont try you may not be able to fail but you also wont be able to suceed. Well anyway i am excited about christmas:D Good luck with everything!
midnight84118 chapter 51 . 12/14/2009
good luck
Kat chapter 50 . 12/13/2009
This book is amazing complex and in my opinion well written as well. I read in your note that you probably wouldn't be starting the second book until November and it being December I am curious if you have and also curious if you are planning to put the second book up all together or in chapters. The clip of the third date made me want to read the second book even more. :) and the other reviewer that I don't remember the name of is right, I don't think you'll need much luck on the publishing. Can't wait to read the continuations!
Trance19666 chapter 50 . 12/2/2009
i just finished Slave of Heaven. it's really good. i like your characters a lot. they have a lot of depth.

~Mandy~
Beast Of Brisingr chapter 12 . 11/13/2009
Have you been updating? Or rather revising? I keep noticing small little details that I didn't read before. Either way its still amazing!
dedicatedtoroses chapter 50 . 10/24/2009
I love this story :) I hope everything goes well with your publishing endeavors. However, personally I'm very sad about Lilith's brother Alec. I secretly think there's enough angst for a side story ;)
Lily chapter 50 . 10/23/2009
YAY! I'M SO HAPPY NOW! I CANNOT WAIT FOR THE SECOND BOOK/THE REWRITE. ep! lol i love you ! ur such a great writer and im sure you'll get hundreds of offers. :):):):) keep up the fantastic work!
x0Ever0x chapter 50 . 10/20/2009
Omg! I love your story! Its the best one yet that ive read on frictionPress. And I just thought id let you know that I think you're a great story writer and I really hope you get your books published bc I would definitely buy it. No doubt! So yeah that's it, just wanted to say i'm a big fan:)
MahinaMoon chapter 35 . 10/10/2009
I don't see why you have to introduce the twins earlier. Bringing them in here for the first time works just as well.

This was a fun chapter. It really showed off the vampires'...human...side.
MahinaMoon chapter 18 . 10/10/2009
Hahahaha! That incident with Sorin was hilarious! Poor, naive and rejected Lily. I think that scene highlights the chauvinism of Nephilim culture more than any other description you've given so far. Their sheer disregard for women is astounding.

*reads on*
renegade01 chapter 50 . 10/5/2009
wow...that was absolutely awesome.

i've jst been reading this story straight for a couple of days and i probably wudv finished sooner if i was living on my own (cos then i wud ignore pretty much everything else, esp household chores)

but i absolutely LOVE it. like bigtime dude. Lucien is jst one hell of a character and i also think lily is a wonderfully lovable heroine- sometimes it jst feels a little fake but those scenes with her fighting the blood hound (awesome btw) were genuine and you cud really picture it and feel her strength. i was a little disappointed that lucien only cared for her wolf side more than anything else but with a potential 6 books, i guess they have time to grow...

u r such a tease with that date excerpt! hehe. i'm glad u put it up though.

at first i thought u might hav finished all 6 bks and they were just waiting on ur profile for me to read (cue heart attack moment from over-excitement) but when i saw just the one...sigh. at least i get to read the first one all the way to the end.

good luck with publishing- u don't need it. i can't wait to read ur second one. all the best. x
AnnaSikanda chapter 50 . 9/12/2009
Oh and also wanted to say I am a big mythology buff and I like how you mix all the different myths while staying true to their spirit. I am also pagan too so its nice to see someone treat the stories w/ respect and not butchering them like a lot of stories and shows/movies tend to do. People need to keep in mind these were peoples beliefs at one time and even today people believe in these "myths" or at least the general spirit of them and it angers me a little when people totally destroy them!

I also like using different myths as well in my stories. Lilith is one of my favs as well. Also like Egyptian myhtology...Isis is one of the coolest goddesses but Inanna/Ishtar is pretty kickass as well:) Love the holy trinity thing am trying to incorperate that into my story...

Anyway will be eagerly awaiting your next story~! I will definetely by your book -maybeeven spring for the hardcover :)
AnnaSikanda chapter 50 . 9/12/2009
Wait I like the whole Lucien as a rock star thing -its hot! and no you can never have to much lucien! NEVER!

And yeah I agree w/ the person who said your story is better then twilight. Twilight is super dull compared to your story. And I will take Lucien ANY DAY over Edward!

and yeah I like Lily w/ a bit more of a spine. I can't wait to see her stand up to her "father" - speaking of which when are we gonna meet her real dad? Is he even still alive? hopefully we find more in the 2nd book!

one thing I missed in the re-write is the background on lily's mother about how she was raised w/ light elves and all- are you bringing that back for the the re-write? because the character of lily's mom intrigues me...something in the way you write almost leads me to believe she knows what is going to happen. I would love for you to expound more on this in the re-write or in upcoming books...heck I could see you writng a pre-quel of sorts using that as a storyline(see I love your sotry so much I already want pre-quels lol!)
donfearsnothing chapter 50 . 9/2/2009
I just finished reading your story and I swear, I couldn't put it down! It has to be the best and most well-written story on fictionpress. I am so hooked! And I'm waiting impatiently for November when I can hopefully read the second book. Just...wow. It had such an indepth story line, I loved how original it was and how different. You really went to great lengths to describe so accurately a supernatural world. I love the Lucien/Lillith dynamic. They bounce off eachother so well. I hope you succeed with this story. ]
Not Dead Fred chapter 50 . 8/20/2009
Wow. It took me 27 hours to read all chapters and, beyond simple word choice and spelling errors, I think this is one of the best things I have read in quite awhile. It mosy certainly well and above the cliche garbage that litters this site. I sincerely hope you get published.
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