|Reviews for Together in Minds|
| Wes chapter 1 . 5/17/2011
Pff, this's like a crown of sonnets
Like the trees and leaves
They found each other this day
Do let me note that on the "Trees, between them" it only has 4 syllables, you might wanna revise that.
So does "Each, every thing" but that can be fixed by just placing "and" between Each and every. -this does make me wonder, does it actually have to be 5-7-5? Perhaps 4-7-5 works as well.-
Well, I'll stop checking on 'em like that~.
Do keep practicing
I would like to see some more
Onwards, keep going!
| Arcthalohs chapter 1 . 2/14/2009
These poems are good and well-written. I like the way that they fit together to tell a story even though each is only a handful of words. I believe the hidden haiku is:
"Like the trees and leaves
they found each other this day