Reviews for hello
april and the phantom chapter 1 . 7/15/2009
that was so powerful. especially the second to last stanza. i mean the whole thing seriously packed a punch.
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 2/14/2009
Oh, I like it. Very creative and yet it's completely relatable and true to your life, too. And you have a very pretty name. (That is, assuming this is all true. Even if it's not, very cool.) Keep writing! :)
all you need is oxygen chapter 1 . 2/11/2009
this is brilliant.

i really love everything about it.
tangerine dreamer chapter 1 . 2/1/2009
wow. i love the style you're written this in, so simple, yet in-your-face. you tell a heartbreaking story about many girls today. if this is from personal experience, you couldn't have put yourself out there any better. keep writing, and remember you're not alone. ]
bran4ever chapter 1 . 2/1/2009
"if anyone cared to read it"

This is probably the line i think best shows the narrator's thoughts.

I love your style of writing.

I like the aside in parenthesis.

I am sorry you have the knowledge to be able to write such sorrowful pieces,

but they are thought provoking,

and interesting to read.
bipedalcooney chapter 1 . 2/1/2009
An interesting poem. I like how the lines are chopped and cut short at the beginning of each stanza; it really says something about the girl in the poem. Each of her worries is vividly realistic, and that makes this poem incredibly relatable. Wonderful writing; you've not only expressed something emotional, but you've described the condition of so many young girls today. Great work, keep writing!