|Reviews for lost|
| rippling iris chapter 1 . 2/6/2009
oh sad. but very nice imagery. i like the second to last stanza. for some reason this poem make me picture a desert right before a rain storm. very cool.
the last line feels alittle strange. maybe if you took out the "oh". i dunno. other than that it was great.
| Katie Nicole chapter 1 . 2/2/2009
This is very lovely [:
I adore your metaphors; the idea of secretly picking up pieces of broken dreams is so innocent and sad and beautiful.
And trying to see past a literal smokescreen of thoughts.
I also like your few rhymes - they seem last minute, but they fit. They aren't consistant, but it works out.
Great job with this [:
| Which Mistake am I chapter 1 . 2/2/2009
O i really like this. i cant tell you specifically why but i really do. Its really good lol