Reviews for Lonely
Fearless-Elizabeth chapter 11 . 1/25/2010
hey sorry I havent reviewed in forever...but I've been really busy with everything. I havent been on this site in god only knows how long. I love the chapters. Keep it up. ttyl

crazyhypervampiregurl chapter 11 . 9/30/2009
and the idiot mucks up agen! stupid ace!
CrazyInAGoodWay chapter 11 . 9/27/2009
:) love it! and he better feel bad :P hes a pooper hahaha anyways post more soon
CuriousContradiction chapter 11 . 9/26/2009
Aw, this is good. :) I like your characters a lot. I hope this doesn't come across as insulting or anything; I'm just trying to give a little bit of constructive criticism. You have good adjectives and funny descriptions and great dialogue, but I think it's really important to watch for your grammar and punctuation as well as bolding. I'm also not a huge fan of constant point of view changes, but hey, it's a personal preference, and it works for some people. Overall, I really like your ideas. :)
crazyhypervampiregurl chapter 10 . 8/30/2009
cals so sweet! ace was mean 2 kairi!
CrazyInAGoodWay chapter 10 . 8/23/2009
AW :'( i f'ing LOVE HIS BROTHER! post more soon :)
Lanie Is chapter 10 . 8/23/2009
Haha. Gratzi. :]

If it makes you feel any better, I used to be "MiniFeverency".

I AM technically an old/new reader. Haha. :D
AlphaBeatKayGee chapter 10 . 8/23/2009
Ok so...when i first saw this in my inbox...i completely forgot what i left it alone..but another came so i figured..alright i'll read it! And...i did..and i kind of don't remember everything that happened in the past. That's why i think that when authors go away for long periods of time they should do a short recap at the beginning of the return chapter. Nevertheless i liked it. Chapter 10 more than 9. Its pretty great...update soon then!
Lanie Is chapter 9 . 8/21/2009
Update soon?

crazyhypervampiregurl chapter 9 . 8/21/2009
caleb sweet! so ace likes kiari! cool story!
CrazyInAGoodWay chapter 9 . 8/21/2009
i really really like it... post more soon! and just remember... when you start a new story... you need to continue the old ones! i hate when authors forget about a story for another one that just ends up failing... anyways we all love it and i hope you post more soon!
sour cherry chapter 8 . 6/14/2009
Helo! O I am in love with your story... Ace is so cool, yeah! And Kiari is funny... I loved the "squishy butt" thing. I'm always weirded out when I see the name "Kiari" though because it reminds me of my Kingdom Hearts I/II phase. o_o Anyway, update! Please! For me? XD

Over and out,

sliver of silver 101 chapter 8 . 4/18/2009
yes, yes, you did ignore me. oh well.

at least it was a dream and he didn't die or anything. the only thing that confused me a little was that were so close to each other. they've only known each other for like a few days. and the comma use was iffy.

but other than that, it was great! update!
Purity of Light chapter 8 . 4/17/2009
Well I just sat and read all 8 chapters in one sitting...

It's a decent plot, but it's starting to go off course, and beginning to make no sense.

Have you considered a beta? Or at least using spell check? You have a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes.

Also, the changing back and forth of points of view is also confusing, sometimes you can't tell who's speaking until halfway through the piece.

As well, there are parts that are quite hard to understand, and you keep changing the looks of your characters. If you're considering changing their looks, change it in all the chapters so as not to confuse new readers!

Oh and you can't post pictures, but you can post links to pictures, which is what most people do.
Fearless-Elizabeth chapter 8 . 4/17/2009
haha. yup ne time. *run away Ace here come's another one* lmao!
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