Reviews for Where the Story Ends
LostInMe chapter 1 . 2/4/2009
This is really a great poem. I only have two suggestions: There's an extra syllable on line two of the last stanza. Personally, I'd delete the "and", but I can see how that word is needed and how removing it will affect the poem, so if you can think of a better way, feel free to do what you want. It's your poem! Also, in the second-to-last-stanza, I don't like the sound of "A story whose path would lead / Into the fiery." I'd suggest adding two more syllables to the former of those two lines.

The rest of the poem was simply amazing. Keep up the great work!
truth decays chapter 1 . 2/3/2009
this was a really good read. it flowed very nicely. keep writing :)
DraganMir chapter 1 . 2/3/2009
This is a good poem, the wording is concise and gets its point across well. I like the line in the last stanza about a smile appearing, it sends me a sense of hope. I get the opinion that the speaker is turning over a new leaf, however cliche the phrase may be.

Excellent as always, keep up the good work! : )

Ty