|Reviews for Where the Story Ends|
| LostInMe chapter 1 . 2/4/2009
This is really a great poem. I only have two suggestions: There's an extra syllable on line two of the last stanza. Personally, I'd delete the "and", but I can see how that word is needed and how removing it will affect the poem, so if you can think of a better way, feel free to do what you want. It's your poem! Also, in the second-to-last-stanza, I don't like the sound of "A story whose path would lead / Into the fiery." I'd suggest adding two more syllables to the former of those two lines.
The rest of the poem was simply amazing. Keep up the great work!
| truth decays chapter 1 . 2/3/2009
this was a really good read. it flowed very nicely. keep writing :)
| DraganMir chapter 1 . 2/3/2009
This is a good poem, the wording is concise and gets its point across well. I like the line in the last stanza about a smile appearing, it sends me a sense of hope. I get the opinion that the speaker is turning over a new leaf, however cliche the phrase may be.
Excellent as always, keep up the good work! : )