Reviews for Kingdoms of the Fountain: Book 1
strobeXlightXstatic chapter 8 . 2/10/2009
I am a bit confused. Maybe if you added some more to each chapter && made them a fraction more detailed, it would be easier to comprehend, seeing as our letle brains are functioning at different paces. Anyway, kudos, doll!

- strobeXlightXstatic
Toffee-Apple chapter 6 . 2/7/2009
Hmm... interesting... I like it! The narrator seems a little devious- I like them.

P.S- is it male or female? That is the question (lol)
Toffee-Apple chapter 4 . 2/7/2009
Wow, great way to end this chapter! You really create good suspense! Awsome!
mashergirl14 chapter 3 . 2/6/2009
whos point of view is this story from?
Toffee-Apple chapter 2 . 2/6/2009
OH! It's getting exciting!


strobeXlightXstatic chapter 2 . 2/5/2009
I'LL BE A READER! PICK ME! PICK ME! PICKMEPICKMEPICKME- -ahem- sorry. well, anyway, overall, this story is rather interesting. A few spelling && grammatical errors here && there, but rather charming. (ugh, I sound like my mom.)

...can you tell I've had caffeine?

- strobeXlightXstatic
Toffee-Apple chapter 1 . 2/4/2009
You know it's a pretty good first draft. I think to improve it I would introduce the narrator; you use "I" so tell us who is "I" or do we not find out untill the next chapter? The idea of the three monarchs is good- overall I really liked it!