|Reviews for The Rose|
| Belladonna Snow chapter 1 . 6/22/2010
This is, I believe, your most powerful poem. Though it is short, the imagery is incredible. My favorite is the last stanza
"I fear one day, the final petal will drop
I will be nothing but a hollow shell
Holding a thorn-studded stem"
It paints so perfectly how once you love someone, you give them a part of yourself. No matter how the relationship may end, you never get that peice back. It is gone forever.
Absoulutely amazeing. Is going strait to favs.
| WriterOnTheMove chapter 1 . 2/16/2010
really beautiful. I love how you used the original metaphor of a rose to represent love, but added your own saddening or even a little morbin tone. Really good job :)
| Your-Magpie chapter 1 . 2/11/2010
typo on the third line, but you probably know that already? ;)
seems like each stanza is an individual petal.
or the rose itself, wilting, receeding in on itself.
love the imagery.
Thorn studded stem
Fall from crimson beauty.
drop into darkeness.
i WOULD say that i would like the second line changed (but this is just me, being nitpicky i may add)
purely because i like the idea of not knowing of it being a rose definitively, apart from the title and the obvious botanical hints like 'petal' and all.
and i like the verbs (lol what a thing to comment on)
but because it gives the feel of fast pace and action-.
fall, drop, crumble(verb?:L)
and of course, hollow shell always makes me think of an upturned homeless tortoise :( hey i want a tortoise!
| Written In Red chapter 1 . 2/11/2010
The middle of this poem is what I liked the most. It flows well and is a perfect metaphor of when we don't mean to hurt someone we love, but we do anyways. I completely get what you're saying in this poem. It makes total sense.
| Vernelley chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
Wow. This is really descriptive.
I see how the symbolism of the rose works, it's very unique and creative.
| Lee Daniel chapter 1 . 1/21/2010
Generally I tend to shy away from poetry that uses a rose as its main focus because it is often too stereotypical (something so beautiful causing so much pain...etc), but this was a refreshingly unique view on a tired subject. Once again you have hit it out of the ballpark (you don't mind if I use a sports reference do you?). I know what it is like to feel as if little pieces are falling away, but I have never before thought of it in the way you described it here.
The only correction I have is that you put a space after the a in your word another and it made it look like two separate words. Other than that, you have once again achieved perfection.