She really doesn't... Work... In her setting. It's illogical.

Is she dead? Thats sooo sad!

Quite interesting.

As funny as your character is, I don't think that her personality matches her upbringing. Take Clan of the Cavebear as an example.

She has quite a potty mouth which can be annoying and funny at times. There are a few errors scattered throughout your chapters but all in all it was quite enjoyable. Good job, looking forward to your sequel.

i'm loving this story so far and did you write that song yourself? i really like it. it has a very nice rhythm

Beautiful. Amazing. Had me lost we the drams but I loved it.

It was just breathtaking.

So far your story is realy funny

Oh dang, one of the best ones that i've ever read.

I really liked it.

& i'm looking forward to the next one!

Great job.

(:

-bbyxhann

Goddamn shit. I cried at the end. I was such a good, funny story.

Omg I abso-fucking-lutely love Araceli. She is so crazy that it makes her adorable. Too darn adorable. And poor Orrion. Such a sad ending! I can't wait till the sequel is up

sad ending.

Good LORD! That was cliffy, coming to a good end, and all over suspenseful to the point of brain pain!

Hurry up and bring on the sequel already!

*faints*

cool. glad u updated. its really good