Reviews for Crash Landing on 12th Street
awesomepossum chapter 4 . 6/15/2011
i love this story and I would really really like it if you continued it please :D
Kicon chapter 4 . 8/22/2009
You misspelled "another" and "lifetime" when she was asking if he wanted to eat or not. Other than that, it was awesome! I love it!

Lanie Is chapter 4 . 8/21/2009
Um, Max needs to die.

And the mean girl with a whorish non-subtibility.



-kind of...

Update soon?
Number One Dancing Queen chapter 4 . 8/21/2009
Great chapter and update soon!
Mo chapter 4 . 8/21/2009
OH! Trenton is falling for Kayla! And Max didn't have the guts to make some girl stop flirting with him even though he was on a DATE with ANOTHER GIRL! Geezums.

I like Trenton better than Max. He seems like he would be better for her.


Mo chapter 3 . 8/21/2009
This Melissa girl scares me.

Should i have a reason to be scared?

Actaully... I think I should be more afraid of Teddy... ;)

Karyn chapter 4 . 8/19/2009
Your story is very captivating. You have a certain way of writing that makes it so I can't stop reading, even if I'd wanted to. I like your characters, they're really well formed and rounded. Finish this story, it's really good. I do have a few comments though. You need to make it so this story isn't so choppy. I wondered why Kay was sitting in the rain on the stairs behind the diner, you never said why she was there, nor did you give a good reason for her being there. Make sure that when your writing, you're making everything flow like music, if it doesn't flow, sometimes things get left out and then it's a little harder to follow. I really did enjoy your story though. I'm not sure why I liked it so much, but when I got to the end of what you have written, I found myself wishing there was more. The whole love triangle is a very intriguing idea. To me, Trenton seems dark and mysterious and his story still needs to come to light. I'd say that within the next chapter, you may want to have him tell Kay what his story is, or something is going to be missing. Keep writing, it's a good story.

VampireAcademyDB chapter 4 . 8/19/2009
Yo aweasome story I dnt lk max that much nymore Update Soon!
rachelaine chapter 3 . 7/14/2009
It's cute but going no where so far. Hopefully that will change. :D
Number One Dancing Queen chapter 3 . 6/27/2009
I bet Friday is really going to be fun for them...I think...Update soon.
Lanie Is chapter 3 . 6/22/2009
:D I liked it...
Hail and Sleet chapter 3 . 6/22/2009
Hey, I like your story. It's interesting and absorbing. Trenton's my favourite character so far... I don't really know why, but he makes me smile all the time.

This is progressing well, and it can improve more in future. I hope you update soon!
MarloCarlo10 chapter 3 . 6/21/2009
Loved this chapter!

Although I'm confused on the family situation. I'm guessing that the parents are divorced but what about the living situation of the kids?
Scorpiongurl324 chapter 1 . 6/21/2009
It was good! Update soon!

Kicon chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
Yay! So good!

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