|Reviews for When the World Ends|
| Broken-Angel-1994 chapter 1 . 9/9/2009
Beautiful. I hope your friends realize how much you love them. Most of my poems base around amazing friends as well.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/8/2009
I think the idea is cliched, but the way you described it was actually pretty unique except for the last line. That was kinda cheesy, but the rest was pretty good.
It read well. It flowed nicely and the rhyming worked well when read out loud.
My only issue is your punctuation. Your first stanza is not a sentence. All of those lines are phrases, you need the rest of it. As this happens, this happens (or doesn't happen). That would be the second stanza. Also, in the second stanza grammatically you don't need a comma after every line.
Still the piece itself is good. I also like how it can be applied to different relationships.
| lymli chapter 1 . 2/11/2009
it's a sweet poem, true friends should be like that.
| teenagedirtbagbaby chapter 1 . 2/11/2009
i like it :) short and simple