Reviews for A Secret No One is Supposed to Know |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter but I have a major suggestion. If these characters are all going to play a major role in the story, I would suggest giving more detail and distinguishing characteristics to them so the reader can tell them apart. The main character is easy enough but more information on the others would be nice. I don't know much about what they look like, thier behavior, their families etc. But this chapter did manage to convey suspense to a certain degree. Now it looks like things are going to happen all over again! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh shoot, I realized this was already up a long time ago and I never noticed it. Still good though (I can't believe I never noticed this until now!) The main character's narration is very good. It keeps the reader hooked and we want to know more. He sounds like he had a very dark past. I can only imagine the bad things that have happened. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yes, it's finally here. A sequel, or a spinoff, to Superteens. Manhattan, Kansas. Great idea for a location. So far, I like the main character's cautious introduction. The very mention of Slade chilled me from when I remembered him from his first appearance in Superteens. But this takes place in an entirely different location than the last one which makes me wonder: how does this connect to the other one? Glad to see this is up. Will continue reading. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Gangster! I'm guessing this is the beast dude from Superteens? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this prologue! It's really chilling... which I'm sure you were going for... so good job! :) Keep writing, please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is really good! Keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() wait so this is the sequel to superteens? i think it is right? i like the format of how you are writing this like you are writing directly to the person instead of like a flashback. can't wait for the oncoming chapters. update soon! |
![]() ![]() col, really liked it you're a good writer! |
![]() ![]() Your story is awesome.i am waiting for your next do write... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Don't worry, I have some ideas P. Like this story by the way, you should definitly continue this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like it... it's interesting please continue as soon as possible... |