Karju! You madafucka! I really hate that guy man. Anyway, such a well-written story. I definitely have to read the second part.

I like man with simple mind...like karju.. only he was way too evil for my liking.. brutes are only fun if we get to order them around..

I like it that the pompous girls have grow up a lot. Reading their mindless and insensitive thought is aggravating enough that i tend to skip them over. You are successful on making the characters.. best regard.

I loved this chapter most of all! The dance was described amazingly, I could imagine the whole thing in my head! Bravo!

I first read this novel about four or five years ago, when my friend, who had loved it, showed it to me. Now here i am, re reading it, after finally finding the link again! I've read countless books with plenty of different stories and characters and this is one of the best i've EVER read, published or not. It's stuck with me for over four years and i remember just how awesome this book is. It is really really great. Maybe some day i'll see it in book stores?

Funnily enough, Ardea is my favourite character! I didn't like her at first to be sure, however the way she is struggling and surviving in situations she's not been in before is quite endearing her to me. She has a whole other person inside her, I feel, a person who was trapped behind her royal mask, and that's coming out now. She's discovering others feelings and taking them into account, best shown when she changed the subject when Sirtalis mentioned about his ex and all were about to open a pity fest.

After Ardea I like Simus because he is soo annoying to Ardea! I don't really see the two as a pair though; plus neither show they are interested. I'm inching towards the older bro, Sirtalis ;P

hi! i'm liliana and i love your story. marcianus is so sexyyy. he looks delicious!loooooooool naja too. they are the perfect couple

xoxo

I LOVE MARCIANUS

LOVE.

i'm addicted to your writing, i hope you know that. ;) this is like the third story i've started reading. anyway, i love this one too. i can see why you've split it up but personally i would have carried on reading if you went up to 70 chapters cos its just that good. so now that your ego has been sufficiently inflated, i'm gonna march on over to part 2. ;)

great story :D

this is really good :)

I like the caring side of Cal's personality that you showed here because it contrasts so briliantly with Ardea's selfish impulses. I did think this chapter could have held a little bit more of Ardea's own personal opinions in order to cement her characterization because she still isn't really a concrete character this far into the plot.

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I like how you described Ardea as beautiful from Jabali's persepective because it gave her another side and showed how self-depreciating she is. I did think that you could have left off with all of your descriptions, because quite a few of them weren't all that necessary and in fact detracted from the flow of the chapter.

I really like the plot twists you've got working for you. They're quite unique and make for an 'on your toes' sort of reading experience. I did have a problem with Ardea fainting, just because it isn't very realistic. I mean, how many people do you know who pass out when they get shocking news? It's a romanticized cliche that many stories could do without.

I especially didn’t like the way you described ‘tossing’ and ‘throwing’ a saddle on the horse. It isn’t at all accurate, and speaks of unprofessional behaviour. I found the turn of events you showed in this movie to be interesting, but perhaps it would have been better to give it to readers slowly rather than dumping it all on them at once. It made the narrative tedious rather than engaging, and because of the quickness in delivering the information, the plot twists felt a little too neatly done rather than a brilliant plot twist.