|Reviews for Holiday: A Heart Attack Valentine|
| Kalista Jia chapter 1 . 4/2/2009
Oh it is so sweet. At least this misunderstanding turns out well and smexy. I have read stories almost alike and someone would end up brutally murdered.0_0
Oh nosebleed at the make out scene. Dont we just love to write those scenes. _
| WeltedWillow chapter 1 . 2/18/2009
OMG this is soo freakin cute
| frogs of war chapter 1 . 2/14/2009
They are so cute.
"Luke was even contemplating castration" might be better as Luke contemplated castration. Removing the helping verbs brings more immediacy and emotion.
"Several of Luke’s personal items were missing from the shelves, but none of their shared items, such as their photos, were untouched." I am trying to wrap my mind around this sentence. Do you mean: ...missing from the shelves, but none ... were "touched" or ...missing from the shelves, "and" none ... were untouched or something else?
It felt a little rushed in some places like Luke's discovery to decision and Eric's proposal to making out, but then I'm not a guy. Great Job.
So, is the next one Easter, April Fools or St. Patrick's?