|Reviews for Subtlety is why penguins hate Rick|
| j chapter 1 . 4/14/2013
update please! this story seems freaking amazing! i love it already! please please update soon!
| Serenity G chapter 1 . 5/23/2012
omg i love this kid!
| AlbinoApples chapter 1 . 5/4/2010
m'kay, you should update. Soon? Please?
| Poptart Guava King chapter 1 . 4/16/2009
This intrigued me. Especially the final sentence. I really hope you plan on continuing this. :)
| Lerene chapter 1 . 2/17/2009
My head hurts for trying to figure out Cara language. But I love the story. Your stories always rock my socks (god that was a corny line).
| Demena chapter 1 . 2/16/2009
hmm i thought it was good...2 things were bugging me the whole time though
1. Ari's friend's talking...like i can deal with all the acronyms and shit, thats not hard to deal with...its just it seems like wherever she goes shes "yelling" or "screaming" at someone...thats a little over the top imo...just tone that down and you're set there :)
2. Ari seems to act a LOT like a girl...and people seem to treat him like a girl. idk if you wanted him to act like this, but i just thought you should know that i noticed it...at one point a group of GUYS came up to him and said "we love you" or something along the lines of that...i think you have a big decision regarding this...if Ari ends up being bi/gay then its fine...but at the end it says he wanted to "meet a nice girl and have a thousand fat babies...blah blah blah" but you also said that he thought thats what his life was SUPPOSED to be like...
so i think you need to make the choice of having Ari either switch over to a girl, its not hard to rewrite the first chapter, replace he's with she's and all that stuff...i think it would make the story EASIER to write...if you are looking for a challenge though (and i would LOVE to see you take this choice, its tougher and more a test of your writing skills) make him bi/gay...already seems to be going there though so...yeah
ok i normally dont write reviews that long but i really need to tell you those...ill be watching this story with great interest to see where this goes...cant wait for more! :)
| Loveless Breath chapter 1 . 2/16/2009
...WOW! I really like it. THough some of the dialogue confused me. It's really good though I hope you update.
| JtheChosen1 chapter 1 . 2/16/2009
wow...i really don't know what to say to this...other than it is completely random, yet somehow nostalgic of my own middle school years (except for the 98% average, i was more in the 80's haha).
very good work, and i like it!
only grammar blip i caught was:
Take it like a woman and give me you’re goddamn fucking pudding
you're should be YOUR