Reviews for honeysuckle lane
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 3/1/2009
love your formatting, the main poem plus the lines to the right. and the graphic, emotional face of this. the words have power, even through the hurt, and it shows... - it cuts.

"much, but really, you're just trying mend a wound"

-trying *to* mend, i think you meant.

superb work.
Manifest-Destiny-x X chapter 1 . 3/1/2009
There's a lot of emothion behind this piece, for sure. I like that, because the poem is therefore more believable.

The formatting was interesting and held my attention. I would love to see more work in this style.
Kolle chapter 1 . 3/1/2009
The displacement worked flawlessly, I loved it; it didn't draw away from the flow. The imagery was affective, powerful. Good job ]
angel-Janna chapter 1 . 2/20/2009
God, that was a good poem. The wound is my favourite part, and a close second is the x on her back. The poem got under the skin of the love-hate, and the confusion.

Keep writing!

Stiff Spines chapter 1 . 2/19/2009
Wow. That was very good, I really enjoyed it. I loved the structure & how it spelled out, "sometimes i fucking hate you." The imagery was great. But, I do think you could have capitalized the I's. Overall, great job.
softersin chapter 1 . 2/17/2009

ode to melancholy chapter 1 . 2/17/2009
Very good, old or not. I love it.