Reviews for Childish Neutrality
LostInMe chapter 1 . 2/24/2009
Isca chapter 1 . 2/21/2009
"It lacks the schemes and dreams." Nice internal rhyming here-it's catchy.

"Unlike the children within whose lungs it dwells." The bitter tone here is wonderful.

"Scratching at the concrete in their bones." Stunning imagery. Powerful message.

"Fruitlessly youthful." Lovely diction.

"They criticize my dissonance." Wow! This line is quite creative and captivating. :)
FiveToCharm chapter 1 . 2/21/2009
Wow, this was quite morbidly beautiful. I most liked the lines, "

crisply crippled by an airless winter/scratching at the concrete in their bones". Splendid imagery, well done :)