Reviews for Eyes
Storyteller's Shadow chapter 1 . 3/28/2009
Only 2 things to fix, and it doesn't have to do with the writing. Don't put the : after inside and eyes, there is no need, and it looks like a list rather that a poem. Also, I almost skipped over the last two lines, because they were in the middle. I think it would be better if you put them to the left. Very well written, good job. I like it very much.
lymli chapter 1 . 2/27/2009
it reminds me a look means a lot.