I wonder if Allyson's twin is gonna get a bigger role in the story...

Aww!

*squeals with excitement*

I can't wait for the rest of the date!

;D

Sorry it took me so long to read and review!

The conversation was great and very real, seeing as they would be nervous.

Amazing job!

More!

tee-hee

Yay! ;] ;]

I was so super happy when the alert came into my inbox like a minute ago.

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[I'm such a nerd for being on the computer. Lol!]

ANYWAYS,

This chapter was disappointingly short.

But that's okay, because you updated!

Yay!

I am still hopelessly in love with the idea, and I can't WAIT for the date.

I hope things go well.

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I'm such a hopeless romantic..

but the descriptions certainly painted a picture in my mind, and I hope you can update tomorrow.

You're welcome for reviewing, silly.

;D

O goodness me; how this review is LONG over-due.

;D

Anywhosers, I'm still absolutely in LOVE with the plot/story line/writing style.

You're definitely engaging and intriguing.

[I love giving good reviews! (]

But, I did notice one thing: Didn't she say in the beginning this:

"I could tell he liked me but I didn't want to say anything, afraid of what his response would be"

and then, later in this delectable chapter, she says this:

"I couldn’t tell if he liked me but it seemed so"

And, to me, that's like... an extreme and direct contradiction.

Lol!

But, other than that, it's left me craving for more.

Perhaps an update, soon?

And, thanks for reviewing my stories! I sincerely hope that you're enjoying them and would love any advice you have.

Have an AMAZING day!

xoxo

Kayla

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Yay for updates!

;]

Okay, so a few typos, but hardly anything. I burst out laughing at this one, however:

"He smiled over her shoulder at me before going back to his work."

Now, I don't think it's supposed to be 'over HER shoulder', unless Seth has a realy big secret. Hahahahaha.

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Okay, so... to answer your questions:

Cait is likeable, yes, but kinda... blah so far? But I have a feeling that as we progress into the story and its storyline we'll see her true colors shine. You haven't given us alot to look at in way of personality, a few brief mentions mostly, and then her talking at the end of the chapter with Seth.

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I think that David was wondering if he and Ally were going to make a good couple, like Seth and Cait. Which, *-coughcough-* they so WOULD...! :D

And I think that Seth should have a conflict between the two of them.

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Haha. Even the whole 'siblings dating siblings' is a little over used, I have a feeling that you will be able to make it work into something refreshing and original.

]

I love it, love it so far!

Can't wait for the next update.

Hope my suggestions help!

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Oh my goodness. What secrets does the house hold? I think I'm understanding the name of the story now, 'Passages'. ;]

How traumatic for all of the children.

The diary is tres curious, along with the keys, seeing as their mother didn't know that she was going to pass away. And how on EARTH did the trunk get there?

I must urge that you update soon, though I'm most definitely not one to talk. Hehe. -_-

I'm working on it!

I'm getting better!

XD

Yay. I promised I'd finish the story, and I did.

Now I'm off to Mary!

Lol.

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Woah... trippy! So David and Cait are siblings, huh? Interesting. I LOVE the possibilities that this story could hold! David and Ally are SO SO SO cute. I can't wait to read more about their relationship... and I hope that it becomes a relationship... *-wink wink-* _-

:]

So yup yup!

Again, I love your writing style. It's graceful and flawless. I only found one mistake, near the beginning when David and Kara were talking to Seth and Ally, Kara said: "So you have sixth other siblings" and I belive its just supposed to be six. But that was minor, and easily fixed. I love it!

BRAVA!

XD

Wow!

Way to suck me into a new story. .

I'm so excited and am quite frankly surprised that this doesn't have any more reviews...!

So, just a tad bit of constructive ideas: The description of all of her family was a bit blocky,like all just.. there. It was alot to take in at once, but I think I understand.. kind of.

But I absolutely loved your descriptions of the house; it so easily painted a picture in my mind! (

And, holy COW. A family of 9... jeez. SEVEN siblings.

EESH!

I love the relationship between Seth and Allyson already; the protective older siblings who run the house, basically. It's always sad when they have to compromise their own childhoods, though. I'm very excited to see where this story is going and I PROMISE to read the rest of the chappies today!

DD

See who's already doing better?

Aren't you proud?

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I love it, in short!