|Reviews for Imperfect Idols|
| Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 5/4/2009
Very good, I like what you have to say here.
| SEMMU chapter 1 . 3/4/2009
Very cool imagery projected in the last two stanzas. I'm big on concrit; after all, that's how we improve. So, intead of telling you what is great about your poem, (there's plenty to tell) here's some advice.
You suffer from my most despised problem: giving too much info. My favorite poets are masters of omitting the "nonessentials". For example: ( ) words that may be omitted.
(All) I ask
(is that) a little
We (all) have
to be cracked
I'm unclear as to what you mean by "dedicate to warmth"? It may just be something I'm missing or you may wish to revise, depending on your attended audience.
Well, I hope that helps and thanks for the review.