|Reviews for lies like lemonaide|
| R. Douglas chapter 1 . 3/7/2009
This was the first poem I read. D
Anyways, the natural rhythm is wonderful and the repetition in the first stanza is really nice.
Past the actually mechanics, it's just an amazing poem. Well done.
| ZombieMcQueen chapter 1 . 3/5/2009
very nice. I liked the different textual variations on cold a lot :)
| Musetta's Waltz chapter 1 . 3/5/2009
There's a loveliness in this poem that I can't quite put my finger on. The first stanza makes its impression as a whole, no line in it is that significant but taken together it is impressive.
The thrice repeated cold is terrific. I think of stars which are brilliant ice and fire.
And your last word - perfect.
I see a dark green field under a deep sky, waving with tall grass and the promise of rain in the air.
| ForeverBehindTheImpression chapter 1 . 3/5/2009
I love the first verse. Your style of writing is lovely :)