Reviews for Little Lily of the Valley
Cooked Juice chapter 1 . 3/7/2009
funny summary: He never expected sexy Halcyon to desire him. No matter how hard Eternity tried to kick him away, he always failed. Either Eternity is a wimp or either Halcyon is just too sexy to resist.

didnt expect that one. Are u having mood swing? lmao. You go suspence to tragic to humor your stories. one thing: What a SHORT chapter, u write more than this usually. Mood swing definately. But ur bottom characters are always so beautiful to imagine. I think I like this Eternity. like i said before, your bottom characters go from mysterious to well abused to mutant! serious mood swing. sorry cant beta u, my English sucks. hope ya continue more
BlaznFangurl chapter 1 . 3/7/2009
"But in his eyes, men were ugly creatures."

Cough, sir are out of your F#$%&*G mind! But yes this is very good, I am hooked and a guy that looks like a girl...drool...if only(naughty thoughts)(fans self) cough had to cool off there a second..Write more or I shall send my army of evil kittens after you kidding(or am I?)
essie chapter 1 . 3/7/2009
i like the ideas. very interesting. however, get a beta. your grammar is borderline pass. a few added words would really help the flow of your story.
Subbie chapter 1 . 3/7/2009
AW! I love it! Please continue! Its sounds so awesome.


PS: he should have a cat's DNA implanted in him!
Narq chapter 1 . 3/7/2009
mememe! I want to be the first to review! Anyways, this was wonderful! You did a great job of describing Eternity! I think I like him :)

Great work!

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