whoa...the ending was deep. sad story, though written well, flows nicely...write more?

I didn't read much but the end, but I know it's quite good. Are you Indian? Even if you are not, you did bring out the spirit of the story. Another such story belongs to Madhavi. I am not really sure that you will know this story if you haven't read entire mythology. This is one of the very less known stories, for the fact it promotes multi-husband, nuns and rebellion of a woman. if ever you have time, try do it. I would love to read it from your perspective.

Your story left me sad, but in the good way which leaves you a melancholy and thoughtful, instead of crying on the floor or something like that. Thank you.

Wow. This is really good. You can feel the emotions that Ahalya goes through. I had heard this story, but had never really paid attention to it till now.I was wondering how you got the idea of doing this story? Its vrey beliveable and human.

wow! this story is really good! your writing is so fluid and graceful. Please update more, i cannot wait to read more of this story.

Wow. This was was awesome. You described the two's feelings wonderfully, and I almost wanted to go and find the original story. The way you did it was very classy, with not too much description, and I enjoyed this story very much, and felt for the character in these few amount of words. Well done!